Wednesday, November 7, 2012

The Plutonian – Redemption Quest – MK Stangeland Jr.

(4 Panels)

Panel 1: Large panel, taking up roughly the top third the page. QUBIT and PLUTONIAN stand in the middle of a room which is surrounded by a number of large monitors. On each of the monitors is a selection of panels from IRREDEEMABLE which show the PLUTONIAN and his vast array of destruction.

PLUTONIAN: What am I looking at?

Panel 2: Closer panel of QUBIT and PLUTONIAN, focusing more on them than the monitors around them.

QUBIT: It’s you in another universe. Where these events have already taken place.

PLUTONIAN: I did all this?

Panel 3: QUBIT turns to look at PLUTONIAN. PLUTONIAN has a look of anger developing on his face, but it’s not clear what he’s angry about.

QUBIT: Not you.

QUBIT (2): Not yet, at least.

PLUTONIAN: Why are you showing this to me?

QUBIT: Because it could be you.

Panel 4: Long panel stretching across the bottom of the page. Panel looks at the monitors, showing some of the most devastating moments from IRREDEEMABLE.

QUBIT: I haven’t shown this to anyone else yet, because I fear how they might react.

QUBIT (2): But I’m showing it to you, Tony, because I hope that by knowing what could happen, we can avoid the same thing happening here.



  1. Great idea, and while there is a hint of tension at the end, the rest felt a wee bit flat to me.

  2. Not the most action packed or tense one pager I have ever seen, but the concept is strong, it felt like the slow burn to a big story. You could do a lot with this idea and you set up a lot of nice little things in one page. Great stuff.

    Also loved the title, it just has this wonder connotation to it.

  3. I like the idea, but I feel like there's a little more dialogue than is absolutely necessary. I think the piece could benefit from a bit of a trim or a bit more space to breathe.

  4. The page itself is solid, but could do with a bit of tinkering here and there (mostly with the dialogue).

    That said, the title of the page is great and hints at a larger storyline. One perhaps where The Plutonian is trying to atone for things he hasn't even done yet.


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