1. Inside a
bank. People are laying on the floor,
covering their heads and afraid. Members of Team Rocket are standing in various
spots looking menacing. The ring leader
stands in the middle of the room.
LEADER
We have no interest in your money. We require only
your Pokemon. Hand them over and no-one
gets hurt.
2.
The hostages who were lying on the floor are now standing, pokeballs in
hand putting them into the sacks held by the various members of Team
Rocket. The leader stands,
watching. At the back of the panel a man
is trying to sneak out the door, pokeball in hand. The Leader has seen him.
3.
The Leader is throwing a pokeball.
LEADER
Gyarados—
4.
The door which the man was trying to escape through is now blocked by
the hulking Gyarados ( http://swiftor.com/attachments/f22/3159d1303755260t-what-your-favorite-pokemon-gyarados.png
). It stares down at him. The man is scared.
LEADER (off panel)
--use Bite.
5.
Gyarados has bitten off the man’s arm.
The man screams in pain.
MAN
YARGHHHHHHH!
6.
The leader is standing above the severed hand of the man, his pokeball
still in the hand. He smirks at the horrific scene. In the background the other hostages are
suddenly scared for their lives.
THE LEADER
I did say ‘hand’ them over, didn't I.
I can get behind this version of Pokemon.
ReplyDeleteNice gag too!
My main question is what's keeping the entirety of the the people being robbed from trying to use their own pokemon to fight back.
ReplyDeleteI really like it, Ben. There's a nice bait and switch with the bank scene, and the brutality of the arm biting works well in my estimation. My only nitpick is that something feels a little off about that opening dialogue. A tad stiffer than I thinks is necessary. Digging rest of it though.
ReplyDeleteTotally dig the concept, I had toyed with the idea myself but used something different for the site when I saw your page.
ReplyDeleteThe final panel gag was super silly but that played off nicely with brutality of the attack.
As the reader I'd almost like to see Gyarados come out before the guy tries to run. First that gives the gang the intimidation factor, which is why the hostages don't try to fight back, it also gives your runner his final push to make a break for it. The appearance of such a big powerful pokemon like Gyarados makes for a great catalyst for the action.