Tuesday, December 25, 2012

Rudolph- Beacons -Dan Hill

Page One

1.1
OPEN on a tight shot of a REINDEER looking at us, its head tilted slightly. Snowflakes fall around it like confetti.

CAPTION
In the beginning it was just about the money. An assignment.

CAPTION
A story to fill a colouring book.

1.2
ZOOM OUT to show that the reindeer is in an enclosure. We’re in Chicago Zoo in the winter of 1938. Snow continues to fall from the cloudless, pale blue sky.

A man with his back to us holds the hand of his four year old daughter in front of the enclosure. They are both wrapped up in winter clothes.

This is ROBERT L. MAY and his daughter, BARBARA.



CAPTION
Enter Robert L. May, native of Chicago.

1.3
CUT TO a CLOSE UP on Robert, facing us, as he crouches down at his daughter’s side pointing towards us/the reindeer. She smiles gleefully.

CAPTION
Loving father.

1.4
CUT TO a CLOSE UP on Robert’s hands. Both of them are holding the frail and pale looking hand of his wife (off panel) as she lies in bed.

CAPTION
And devoted husband.

CAPTION
Even during times of hardship.

1.5
CUT TO a shot of Robert, looking up at him at an angle. He’s sitting at a desk, a typewriter in front of him, a piece of paper curling slightly towards us from its top.

CAPTION
Slowly the story became something more. Something he needed to finish.

CAPTION
It became a reminder.

1.6
Wide panel: CUT TO Robert sitting on the edge of Barbara’s bed. He reads to her from the same sheet of paper that was in the typewriter from the last panel.

CAPTION
A reminder that even when the storm comes and hope seems lost we each have our beacons.

1.7
Wide panel: TIGHT SHOT on Barbara as she beams back at her father.

CAPTION
We can all make it through the dark.

4 comments:

  1. Wonderfully Christmassy in that quietly uplifting way.

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  2. There's so much to love here. A perfect scr¡pt for both the character and the day. Merry Chr¡stmas!

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  3. You got me slightly teared up Mr Hill. A beautiful piece of writing, handled with dignity and care deserving of such a heart breaking yet powerfully uplifting true life tale.

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  4. Wow. This is a brilliant retelling of the story of the Rudolph story that is far more poignant than I ever could have imagined. Perfectly paced, beautiful emotion, this page is a Christmas miracle.

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