Sunday, December 2, 2012

Tiger Lawyer – Cat Got Your Tongue. – Shaun Richens.


PAGE ONE – 6 PANELS.
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1. Establishing shot. Night. Rain falling. Outside the club Foxtrot the name glows in bright neon pink. A crowd snakes from the club entrance all the way around the building. This is a hot spot, and a joint just waiting for trouble.

         CAPTION TIGER LAWYER:
Sometimes to keep the city clean you have to go into the gutter.

2. Close up on TIGER LAWYER. He wears a classy two-breasted suit, his trench coat and fedora. TIGER LAWYER’s paws are on the collar of the coat pulling it up to shield him from the rain.

         CAPTION TIGER LAWYER:
         Sometimes a Tigers got to go into the Lions den.

3. A shot from behind TIGER LAWYER as he crosses the street towards FOXTROT.

CAPTION TIGER LAWYER:
Sometimes you have to get your paws dirty.

4. TIGER LAWYER stands at shoulder height with the BOUNCER on the club door. The BOUNCER is huge like a wrestler, shaved head and covered in tattoos, his arms crossed in front of him. He’s not even looking at TIGER LAWYER.

         TIGER LAWYER:
         I’m here to see the man they call the Fox.

5. Close up on TIGER LAWYER. He is pretending to act a bit twitchy.

         CAPTION TIGER LAWYER:
         The Bouncer gives me nothing. I change tact.

         TIGER LAWYER:
I owe Fox money. He’s guna have one of my nine lives if I don’t get it to him.

         CAPTION TIGER LAWYER:
         I lie.

6. Two shot of TIGER LAWYER and The BOUNCER. The BOUNCER, now looking at TIGER LAWYER, wears a grin so smug you want to punch him just by seeing it.

         BOUNCER 1:
         You don’t like much like the Fox's normally kinda client?
         (Linked)
         BOUNCER 2:
         What you on catnip of sumthin’? Ahaha!
         
         CAPTION TIGER LAWYER:
         I bite my tongue.

         CAPTION TIGER LAWYER:
Let him joke. I’m here for justice.

BOUNCER:
Go on down. Fox is out back in the vip room.


The story continues here.


2 comments:

  1. This is great, moody, page. Good build to an effective page turn too.

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  2. Really solid page here, Shaun. It's a nice noir-filled piece that builds really well. My curiosity was definitely piqued, so I hit the link to check out the rest. It did not disappoint!

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