Tuesday, January 8, 2013

Amalgam Comics -This Subconscious Ain't Big Enough For The Four Of Us -Dan Hill

Apologies for the lateness of this. I had it sitting as a draft still. Doh!

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22.1
1/12 PANEL: ON BRUCE WAYNE (AGENT OF S.H.I.E.L.D) as he stands in a small, dark, concrete room. He’s wearing the usual SHIELD suit and gun holsters. He looks anxious.

1 BRUCE WAYNE Okay Al, give me a sitrep.

22.2
1/12 PANEL: ON ALFRED DUGAN (this universe’s version of Alfred and Dum Dum Dugan). He has the thin and refined look of his DC counterpart but wears a bowler hat, SHIELD combat suit and has a cigar clenched between his teeth.

2 ALFRED A S.H.I.E.L.D assault team pulled him out of a HYDRA detention facility in Uzbekistan last night. We have no idea how long he’s been there.

22.3
WIDE PANEL: From Dugan and Bruce’s POV we are looking through a pane of one way glass and into an interrogation room. In the room is a metal table and a set of chairs either end, all bolted to the concrete floor.

Sitting in one of the chairs is DICK GRAYSON (or as he’s also known in this universe, Moonwing). He’s wearing an all in one orange jumpsuit, the kind you might see on detainees at Guantanamo. 


3 ALFRED (O.P) Signs of torture, physical scarring and so on. He’s unresponsive. Won’t answer to Grayson, Drake or Spector. 

4 CAP Grayson had a sense of humour. Drake was all business. And Spector?

22.4
On Bruce. He speaks into his wrist communicator. 




5 CAP Well, Spector was a maniac.

6 BRUCE I’ll take it from here, Al.

7 BRUCE Moonwing...

22.5
ANGLE on Dick. His head is bowed still. He doesn’t seem to be responding at all. 


8 BRUCE (RADIO) ...can you hear me?

9 CAP Okay. Heh. Stop me if you’ve heard this one...

22.6
CUT TO a TWO SHOT on Dugan and Bruce. Both are taken aback.

10 DICK (O.P) ...Br-Bruce?

22.7
CUT TO Dick. He's turned towards us/the mirror. The slightest of smiles plays across his lips. It’s hard to tell whether it’s relief or something more sinister.

11 DICK Is that really you?

12 CAP Three split personalities walk into a bar...


5 comments:

  1. Mixing Moon Knight's multiple personalities with Batman's multiple Robins, to me, was a master stroke of creativity. I really dug this a lot. Cool stuff, Mr. Hill.

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  2. Very clever idea going on here, using elements from both universes' characters. Great pay-off too. The only thing that bothers me is that the caption narration seems unnecessary, even considering the sharp final line.

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  3. This is a surprisingly dense page, with a lot going on in these panels. I agree that former Robins / Marc Spector split personality is a solid idea and I like how you start to introduce it here.

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  4. Great combination of two ideas that I would have never even thought of using together. This is a clever idea handled really well. Impressive work.

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  5. Unfortunately I can't claim credit for the Moon Knight/Robin combo or Bruce Wayne/Fury. They were already Amalgam characters.

    I just introduced the Joker personality in there after watching far too much Homeland.

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