Thursday, January 17, 2013

Deadpool – Juliet & John – Shaun Richens.


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1.INT. Secret Underground Base of shieldwatch (An amalgamation of Shield, the D.E.O and Knightwatch) The base is located beneath New York City.

JULIET is being lead down a long sterile white corridor. Her hands cuffed behind her back. She is being pushing from behind by the man who captured her and brought her in for the SHIELDWATCH. 

The man known by the name DEAD OF NIGHT or his alias Winston Trent (This character is an amalgamation of Deadpool and Midnighter) DEAD OF NIGHT wears midnighters classic black armor with black trench coat, however he wears a black and white version of deadpools mask. Around his waist he wears two pearl handled pistols in holsters and a katana sword is slung in its scabbard over DEAD OF NIGHTS shoulder.

         DEAD OF NIGHT 1:
         So you’re kinda hot for a space chick.
         (Link)
         DEAD OF NIGHT 2:
         Captain Kirk would have been all over you like a rash.
         (Link)
         DEAD OF NIGHT 3:
         Though space men are more my kinda thing.

         JULIET:
I want to speak to your superiors. You have taken a member of the UNSC as prisoner without the rights to do so.

DEAD OF NIGHT:
Darlin’ first I ain’t got a clue what a UNSC is. Second as far as anyone but a select few know you’re just a downed weather balloon. Right now I’m the best friend you have.

2. JULIET has thrown her head back connecting with the nose of DEAD OF NIGHT.

         SFX (around the impact)
         CRUNCH.

3. Close up on the cuffs around JULIET’s armored wrists, the chains are taut as she pulls to break them.

         SFX (Around the chain of the cuffs)
         SNAP

4. JULIET now with her hands free turns to face DEAD OF NIGHT. He teeth gritted, her face stern and full of rage. Her hands raised like a boxers ready for a fight.

         NO COPY.

5. DEAD OF NIGHT has pulled his mask off and holds it in his hand. His face is scarred and burnt like deadpools. With his free hand he is wiping blood from his nose, which has already healed. A huge grin has spread across his face.

Flanking DEAD OF NIGHT are a squad of SHIELDWATCH agents. They wear armored suits, the yellow sections are white however and they wear the SHIELDWATCH logo (A shield with an eye on it) on their chests. They are armed with high tech looking rifles, which are all trained on JULIET.

         DEAD OF NIGHT 1:
Don’t worry I’ve been greeted by worse than a broken nose before. I like your fire though. You’re guna need that down here.
(Link)
DEAD OF NIGHT 2:
Escort our young lady visit down to the holding room for me would ya boys.
(Link)
DEAD OF NIGHT 3:
Oh and try to find some better ‘cuffs.



8 comments:

  1. Things are getting interesting. I like your portrayal of this Deadpool mash-up, and it's a great little action piece.

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  2. I love the story Shaun and really admire the difficult task you have ahead of you - but I do question the lack of Deadpool in the script.

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    1. My aim with my mash up of Deadpool and Midnighter here was to use Deadpool in a similar manner to how he was used in Uncanny X Force.

      This is meant to be a Deadpool who talks to much and has this darker undertone of humour about him. I tried to capture that and convey in it with Dead Of Nights dialogue. Perhaps it didn't work as I had hoped.

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  3. Seeing how you've used Deadpool here makes me VERY interested to see where the story goes next and how you'll incorporate future characters into your story.

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    1. Agreed. The story is pumping along well, but as the year goes on, this could go in any number of ways...

      Colour me intrigued...

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  4. The Deadpool angle segued well with last weeks Amalgam joint. Does that mean the entire story will take place in the Amalgam universe?

    Solid entry this week.

    I'm also curious whether you have a 'plan' as such (as much as this kind of thing allows anyway).

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    1. For the time being the Amalgam universe will be the home for my characters, it gives me the freedom to try my best to use all the characters that get selected.

      As for a plan, I don't have anything solid as it would just fall apart due to the freeform nature of this writing experiment. However I have some note for story moments and beats I would love to try and hit and a few sub plot ideas that I am hoping to weave in as the year goes on.

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  5. I really like this Dead of Night bloke. Tempted to say he's even better than that excellent bartender from the week before. His dialogue (monologue?) is really well done here, with you giving him loads of personality in this one page.

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