Friday, January 18, 2013

Deadpool - A New Twist On An Old Favorite - Niel Jacoby

Panel 1: Deadpool, unmasked but otherwise suited up in his usual getup, is at the top of the panel, as he stands outside a circle of 6 men, each man tied to a chair with a gag in his mouth. Their placement is as follows:
    1
6     2
5     3
    4

Each man is a member of a different gang, and should be distinguished as such by their ostentatious clothing. Deadpool is holding a revolver, a 6-shooter.

DEADPOOL: LISTEN UP.
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WE'RE GOING TO PLAY A LITTLE GAME. IT MAY BE A BIT CONFUSING AT FIRST...

Inset panel 1: Deadpool loads a single bullet into the revolver.

DEADPOOL: ...BUT I CAN JUST TELL...

Inset panel 2: Deadpool swipes his hand across the cylinder, spinning it.

SFX: WHRRRRRR

DEADPOOL: ...THAT YOU'LL GET THE HANG OF IT IN NO TIME.

Panel 2: Deadpool stands behind MAN 1, holding the revolver to his head and placing his other hand on his shoulder while he leans in on the side opposite the revolver, though not too close. His finger is on the trigger. The man is afraid, sweating.

Inset panel: Deadpool has his face right to MAN 1's ear, as a tear streams down MAN 1'S face.

DEADPOOL: DUCK...
SFX: KLIK

Panel 3: Deadpool has the gun to the back of MAN 2's head.

DEADPOOL: DUCK...
SFX: KLIK

Panel 4: Deadpool is clocking MAN 3 across the back of the head with the butt of the revolver. There should be some blood on the butt of the revolver and in the trail of the revolver's motion. MAN 3's head should be lurching forward from the impact, so we can't see his face.

DEADPOOL: GOOSE!
SFX: THWAKRCH!

Panel 5: Same viewpoint as Panel 1, as Deadpool jogs around the circle, with 4 images of him at different points, connected by speed lines. The first, directly at MAN 3's chair, should be mostly transparent. The second, between MAN 4 and 5, should be less so. The third, at MAN 1, should be even less so, and running backward. The fourth, between MAN 2 and 3, should be completely opaque, and be standing still, leaning on MAN 2's chair. MAN 3 is still slumped over, and the others should be horrified.

DEADPOOL 1: NA-NA-NA-BOO-BOO, BETCHA CAN'T CATCH ME!
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DEADPOOL 2: BETTER HURRY, I'VE ALMOST GOT MY SECOND WIND!
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DEADPOOL 3: MAYBE I SHOULD GO FOR A SECOND LAP, JUST OUT OF THE GOODNESS OF MY HEART.
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DEADPOOL 4: OH, TOO BAD, SLOWPOKE.


Inset panel: Deadpool is holding the gun to MAN 3's unconscious head, while posturing nonchalantly, not even looking at the gun.

DEADPOOL: WELL, I GAVE YOU A CHANCE, BUDDY BOY, BUT IT SEEMS YOU ARE-
SFX: KLIK

Inset panel 2: Same viewpoint as previous. Deadpool walks to the next man, visibly bummed.

DEADPOOL(linked to balloon in first inset panel):-A VERY LUCKY MAN FOR NOW.

5 comments:

  1. Really creative layout here, and darkly great scenario.

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  2. Jeez - of all the amalgams, Russian roulette and duck-duck-goose would never have occurred to me.
    Really TWIST-ed scenario, dude...nice.

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  3. Russian roulette combined with duck duck-goose is perhaps the most fitting combo of games for a character like Deadpool, truly great premise. Your creative layout also works really well with both the theme of your scenario and Deadpool himself, its just that little bit off kilter.

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  4. Deadpool is dichotomy with a dark humorous twist. This puts a neat spin on that using some neat layouts and a good sense of tension.

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  5. This layout is razor sharp. It means the whole page is both figuratively and literally built around Deadpool's insane game. Genius. (it also helps that it's darkly hilarious)

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