Friday, February 15, 2013

Superior Spider-Man - Joyride - Niel Jacoby

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Panel 1: Spider-Ock stands outside in the wintry streets of New York City, taking a deep breath of the cold afternoon air.

SFX: SNNNNNFF

Caption(SP-OCK): I'VE GOT A NEW, YOUNG BODY WITH A NICE SET OF SPIDER-POWERS.

Inset Panel: Sp-Ock looking down at the web-slingers on his wrists.

Caption(SP-OCK): IT'S HIGH TIME FOR A LITTLE JOYRIDE.

Panel 2: Sp-Ock swinging through the city in Spider-Man's costume.

Sp-Ock: WOO-HOOO!

Panel 3: Sp-Ock moonwalking upside-down on the ceiling of Peter's apartment.

Sp-Ock: WOO-HOOO!

Panel 4: Felecia Hardy has just gotten back to her apartment after a long day of burgling. We can see Sp-Ock in the window.

Sp-Ock: WOO-HOOO!

Panel 5:Felecia turns to the window, startled and angered, as Sp-Ock quickly pulls himself up on his web-line.

SFX: ZZ-ZZRP!

2 comments:

  1. I'm having trouble reconciling the vision of Otto having...fun?

    Other than that this is a good page with the last two panels being on the money visuals and humour wise.

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  2. I'm with Dan, I liked the page as it stands and each panel is fun and makes for a fun gag that is inline with your concept. However it doesn't feel very Otto. I thought after your opening gambit with his whole taking this young body for a joyride thing you might have taken Otto to see a science lecture or something. haha.

    But the page is totally fun and works, just not what I expected.

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