Tuesday, February 19, 2013

Unknown Soldier - Aside - Grant McLaughlin

Panel 1 takes up most of the page.  Panels 2 and 3 are split equally along the bottom.

1 - An astronaut stands on the moon looking towards the Earth, his back to the reader.  This panel should be majestic as all get out.


2 - Switch to a shot of the astronaut's helmet.  Through the visor, you can see it's the Unknown Soldier.  He wears a tired look on his face.

CAPTION (UNKNOWN SOLDIER): Too bad they didn't send me here to take in the sights.

3 - While the previous panel focused on the Unknown Soldier's face, this one is looking towards his chest / upper-body.  He has a space gun hanging in front of him from some straps around his neck.  He's moved his hands to grip it.

CAPTION (UNKNOWN SOLDIER): Better get to work.


  1. This would make a great page visually, but also a great hook storywise.

  2. Consider me hooked for this story. Amazing visuals and each panel just adds so many layers to your story. I want to know more, and thats what any good writer should be getting their audience to want. :)

  3. Some crazy visuals going on here and something I hadn't thought of-- the character in an entirely new sphere of battle.


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