(9 Panels)
Panel 1: Opening Title Block. Snoopy is writing while
on top of his dog house – but instead of typing on his typewriter, is instead
trying to type on tablet computer.
MAIN TITLE: Peanuts
SUB-TITLE (1): Featuring Good Ol’ Charlie Brown
SUB-TITLE (2): Created by Charles M. “Sparky” Schulz
SUB-TITLE (3): Written By MK Stangeland Jr.
Panel 2: LUCY is walking in front of CHARLIE BROWN.
She is carrying a football.
LUCY: So I’ll hold the football, and then you try to kick
it.
Panel 3: LUCY has turned to face CHARLIE BROWN.
CHARLIE BROWN looks defiant.
CHARLIE BROWN: Oh, no. I’m not falling for that again. I know how this works!
Panel 4: LUCY holds up a generic smartphone and shows
it to CHARLIE BROWN. CHARLIE BROWN looks contemplative about what LUCY is
saying.
LUCY: Nonsense, Charlie Brown. I’m planning to record it and
put it online. You don’t think I’d save the moment if it meant there was video
evidence of me pulling the football away, do you?
Panel 5: CHARLIE BROWN is thinking to himself as he
walks away from LUCY.
CHARLIE BROWN: She’s right. She wouldn’t embarrass herself
that way if millions could watch it later.
Panel 6: CHARLIE BROWN charges in LUCY’s direction.
CHARLIE BROWN: This time I’m sure to kick that football!
Panel 7: You know the drill – as CHARLIE BROWN
reaches the football, LUCY pulls it away, sending CHARLIE BROWN up into the
air.
CHARLIE BROWN: AAAHHH!
Panel 8: CHARLIE BROWN comes crashing to the ground
on his back.
SFX: CRASH!
Panel 9: CHARLIE BROWN lies on the ground, his face
has a ‘I can’t stand it’ look. LUCY stands over him, holding the smartphone up
for CHARLIE BROWN to see.
LUCY: Sorry Charlie Brown, but videos of people failing at everyday
activities are more interesting than people succeeding at everyday activities.
(END)
(As a bonus this week, after having come to the decision that I was going to try to write a comic that [hopefully] feels not too far removed from the actual thing, I decided to go the extra mile and try to do the art for my script this week as well.)
(I can't say I'm entirely pleased with the result - I'm feeling a mix of "If I'd put more work into it I could have come up with something far closer to Schulz' art style" and "I can only get it so close to the real thing.", but I'd like to think that I can at least give myself points for effort.
If nothing else, the exercise certainly creates a new sense of appreciation for the fact that Schulz himself was able to do the job as consistently as he did for as long as he did - and by extension, it allows a greater sense of appreciation for the work done by skilled comic artist in general.)
Absolutely brilliant. The modernisations are a great touch, and show that Peanuts' appeal is timeless, and the art is fantastic.
ReplyDeleteJ.D really summed this is up for me. The modern touches really do add to the page which works perfectly as a fitting Peanuts page. Also huge points on the bonus art front, I think you did a fantastic job man, the last three panels in particular work as a wonderful sequence.
ReplyDeleteI liked the modern touches and as the other guys mentioned, the art's pretty good, man!
ReplyDeleteYour Peanuts strip art has made me realize just how much I miss Charles Schulz and his daily Peanuts. This is going to be a nostalgic week for us, I think...
ReplyDelete"How can we lose when we're so sincere?" - Charlie Brown
Your passion for and knowledge of the strip is evident here, as you deliver one heck of Sunday comic that could fit right in with those of Schultz while still updating it for today's world.
ReplyDeleteAlso, your drawn strip is a big win. I love it to pieces.