(6 Panels)
Panel 1: Setting – the clouds. The tail of a
filly-aged RAINBOW DASH is sticking out of the clouds as the rest of her sneaks
around out of sight, headed in the direction of the right side of the panel.
SFX: sneak-a-sneak-a-sneak-a-sneak-a…
Panel 2: A young GILDA the griffon is sitting of on
the right side of the panel, looking up at something that’s off-panel. RAINBOW
DASH can barely be seen off to the left side of the panel, poking her head up
out of the clouds where just her head from the eyes up can be seen. While we
can’t see RAINBOW DASH’s mouth, her eyes tell us she’s wearing a prankster’s
mischievous smile.
Panel 3: GILDA turns her head around in suspicion
that someone is behind her. RAINBOW DASH, however, has ducked her head down in
time to avoid being seen, a small disruption in the clouds where her head used
to be the only sign that she was previously there.
GILDA: ?
SFX: sneak-a-sneak-a-sneak-a-sneak-a…
Panel 4: GILDA has a bit of a confused look on her
face as she moves in the direction of where RAINBOW DASH’s head was in PANEL 2.
RAINBOW DASH’s head is
poking out of the clouds from near where GILDA was sitting in PANEL 2 and PANEL
3, though we can again only see her head from the eyes-up.
Panel 5: GILDA turns her head around again to look
where RAINBOW DASH was poking her head up in PANEL 5, but RAINBOW DASH has
again slipped back out of sight.
GILDA: ?
SFX: sneak-a-sneak-a-sneak-a-sneak-a…
Panel 6: The top half of filly RAINBOW DASH is
sticking up out of the clouds to the left side of GILDA, with her mouth open wide
as she shouts something and her front legs held up in the air.
GILDA is reacting in a
shocked surprise with eyes open as wide as possible and jumping up off the
clouds. She’s still looking to the right of the panel away from RAINBOW DASH,
and it’s very clear that RAINBOW DASH has successfully spooked her.
RAINBOW DASH: BOO!
GILDA: !
(END PAGE)
Well-paced humour piece. Nice!
ReplyDeleteGreat piece of pacing that brings to mind classic Looney Tunes shorts. This is cute and lovely in all the best ways and just feels bang on for this book. Also you SFX: Sneak-a-sneak put a massive grin on my face great stuff.
ReplyDeleteNice work on the SFX and a definite Saturday morning short feel to it.
ReplyDeleteI'm always jealous of how effortlessly you seem to write these kinds of all-ages pieces, MK. They just ooze with fun and personality, and this one is no exception. And once again, you kill it with your SFX. Love it.
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