Sunday, March 31, 2013

Wrestlemania - Is He Strong? Listen, Bud, He's Got Radioactive Blood - Niel Jacoby

Panel 1: Peter is walking around backstage in costume, while a flatscreen on the wall shows the action outside.

TV: WELCOME TO THE WRESTLEMANIA 29 PRE-SHOW, EXCLUSIVELY ON YOUTUBE AND WWE.COM. I'M MICHAEL COLE, AND TO MY LEFT IS THE LEGEND, JERRY "THE KING" LAWLER, AS WELL AS OUR SPECIAL GUEST, THE DAILY BUGLE'S OWN JOHN JONAH JAMESON. HOW YOU DOING, JOHN?

TV: PLEASE, CALL ME MR. JAMESON, JONAH IF YOU MUST. WELL, I'M SIMPLY AS EXCITED AS CAN BE. I'VE GOT THE BUGLE'S STAR PHOTOGRAPHER, PETER PARKER, ON THE SIDELINES SNAPPING PICTURES FOR TOMMOROW'S FRONT PAGE, AND I'M HERE CALLING THE ACTION ON THIS TREMENDOUS NIGHT.

Off-Panel(from behind Spider-Man): HEY, ARACHNAMAN! YOU'RE UP!

Panel 2: Spidey is startled and nervous, having turned to face the production assistant who called out to him in the previous panel.

Peter: WHAT?

PA: LIKE I SAID, YOU'RE UP. YOU'RE THE FIRST MAN IN THE BATTLE ROYAL FOR THE PRE-SHOW! THE PYRO'S GOING ALREADY, SO GET YOUR ASS IN GEAR!

Panel 3: As Peter walks towards the entrance, he turns to look at an Arachnaman poster on the wall. Arachnaman is a dead-on recreation of Spider-Man. Peter is nervous.


Thoughtballoon(Peter): WELL, I GUESS I'VE GOT TIME, AND IF I'M LUCKY, PUNISHER'S GOTTEN THE SAME TREATMENT.
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NOTE TO SELF: LOOK INTO COPYRIGHTING THE COSTUME, OR AT LEAST THE SPIDER EMBLEM.


Panel 4: Peter walks out onto the stage.

ANNOUNCER(OP): NOW MAKING HIS WAY TO THE RING, HAILING FROM FOREST HILLS, QUEENS, AT 202 POUNDS,  THE AMAZING ARACHNAMAN!

Thoughtballoon(Peter): JEEZ, THEY'RE EVEN SWIPING MY ADJECTIVES!

Panel 5: close on peter, as the crowd hurls trash at him.

Crowd noise(scattered in background): OH, BOO! HISS! GO BACK TO NEW YORK! YANKEES SUCK! YANKEES SUCK! JER-SEY! JER-SEY!

Thoughtballoon(Peter):TYPICAL JERSEY.

Panel 6: Cole, Lawler, and Jameson are at commentary. Jameson is fuming.

Jameson: THIS MENACE SHOULD NOT BE ALLOWED IN A WRESTLING RING! I DEMAND THIS MATCH BE STOPPED IMMEDIATELY AND THE PROPER AUTHORITIES BE CALLED!

Lawler: THE MATCH HASN'T EVEN STARTED YET, YOU OLD HOTHEAD!




6 comments:

  1. A very busy page here Niel. I like where you are going with it, but I think there is just too much setup. You could have started the page from Panel 5 in my opinion.

    Still, great idea man. The Arachnoman nod was awesome.

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    1. In retrospect, I really could just snip off the first 2 panels entirely and maybe consolidate 3 and 4. Actually, looking at panel 8, I don't even need those. As it is, I've put way too much into those first 3 panels that ends up being reiterated in the last 6 or so. Also, I can't even keep Arachnaman's name straight, even when it's spelled right in the panel right before.

      And I did have a story in mind for the rest of this, which I should probably write down sometime.

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  2. I'd agree that it does seem a bit cluttered, but the tone is perfect, and it was a lot of fun to read.

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  3. Full on page with a heck of a lot going on. The page could be stronger with some trimmer or making it into a two pager, but your tone and ideas are fun and work really rather well.

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  4. I prefer the second version to this. The silver/bronze age tone here is spot on.

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  5. The second version is definitely more streamlined and doesn't feel quite so overwhelmed. As Dan said, a solid silver age buzz to it which works really well.

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