Friday, April 26, 2013

Quantum and Woody - Team Players - J.D. Coughlan


Panel 1: Superman, Wonder Woman and Batman sit behind a desk facing us. Superman and Wonder Woman have open, friendly expressions, Batman has his arms folded and a scowl on his face.

SUPERMAN: What do you feel you can bring to our team?

Panel 2: Opposite POV. Quantum and Woody sit across from them. I don't know if they have costumes, but if not, Quantum should be dressed formally, Woody casually. Quantum calmly talks while Woody sits back in his chair, arms folded, a mischievous grin on his face.

QUANTUM: Well, we have a rather unique power-set, an eager sense of social awareness, a strong desire to help people...

Panel 3: Woody suddenly springs to life, throwing his arms wide. Quantum's expression falls.

WOODY: I can shoot lasers out my face!

QUANTUM: He can't.

Panel 4: Woody counts off on his fingers, Quantum facepalms.

WOODY: I can talk to animals (they just don't talk back), I can solve a Rubik's cube in zero seconds, I can fly at the speed of speed, my whole body is made of indestructibilium, and I'm a level 500 mage in World of Warcraft.

WOODY: Also: magnets.

Panel 5: Woody sits back, confident. Quantum glares at him.

WOODY: And, as far as the dress code goes, while I am very willing to go pantsless, we have to talk about those collars.

Panel 6: Reverse POV again. Superman and Wonder Woman stare blankly, dumbfounded. Batman hasn't changed.

WONDER WOMAN: ...

SUPERMAN: ...

BATMAN: To be honest, we're kinda desperate.

END OF PAGE

3 comments:

  1. BWAH-Hahahaha! Your Woody is hysterical. Panel 4 had me laughing out loud.

    Also: magnets. Awesome.

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  2. Another solid comedic page. Great, great dialogue too.

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  3. Funny page, good work! Feels like a montage, like the jump cut interviews in Parks & Rec - cut from where they let the actors improvise freely.

    A minor piece of (hopefully) constructive criticism. For the page to work I image when we are looking at Q&W, Woody is panel left - so that we "read" Woody first and then Quantum's reaction. In p1 you describe Quantum before Woody. If you describe/introduce Woody first in p1 (as you do in the following panels) this will infer their position in the panel.

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