Monday, April 29, 2013

The Mandarin - Lockdown - Ben Rosenthal

1.  FULL PAGE SPLASH  - The Mandarin is in the lower left of the page.  We can see his full body.  His hands are out stretched, all fingers at awkward angles.  They are clearly broken.  From the rings pour the ten alien spirits whom inhabit the rings.  They all are of a different species, but are coloured the same colour as the ring from which they are escaping.  They are bearing down on The Mandarin.  The Mandarin looks horrified.

--and that’s what the Mandarin didn't understand.  A prison of magic or a science is still a prison.

Eventually the inmates revolt.


  1. This is a pretty cool concept and I like the imagery at work here. The only thing I would perhaps mention is that this might have worked more effectively over multiple panels and then have that final reveal of the alien forces escaping, etc.

  2. Bold splash page, but thats exactly what you want them for.

    Your imagery is wonderful and evocative and your central concept is compelling. I for one would love to see where this is not only going but how we got here.

    Great splash page.

  3. Great page. I want to read the story that ends here :)


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