Sunday, April 28, 2013
The Mandarin - Pain to Come - R. A. Wonsowski
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Panel 1 - Background: TONY STARK, tied to a chair, obviously beaten, face bloodied, suit stained wth dirt and dried blood, drenched in sweat, tie askew. He looks unconscious. He is in a dimly lit cave-like room. Foreground is a clear glass bowl on a wooden table.
NO COPY
Panel 2 - Same as above except a colorful golden ring is dropped in the bowl.
SoundFX: TiNG
Panel 3 - Same as above as another ring is dropped in the bowl, TONY starts to turn his head toward the sound.
SoundFX: TiNG
Panel 4 - Same as now 3 rings ar dropped in the bowl, TONY tries to open his eyes.
(off-panel): Ah. He stirs.
SoundFX: TiNG ting TiNG
Panel 5 - Same; the other 5 rings are dropped into the bowl as TONY tries weakly to lift his head.
(off-panel): I thought we would try something a little different, this time.
SoundFX: TiNGting TiNG TNG tling
Panel 6 - Our p.ov. is now to look down on Tony, a shadow falls across his beaten face as helooks up into the face of his torturer.
(off-panel): You without your weapons, I without mine.
(off-panel): Tell me, Anthony. Without our little technologies, who would inspire more fear. You...
Panel 7 - Reveal of the MANDARIN. He wears an olive green three-piece suit with a white silk shirt and a golden yellow tie. He is cloaked in a black cape,and his long hair is wild. However, his face is no longer human, but a thin humanoid version of a Chinese dragon, grinning toothily, hungrily. His skin is a mottling of green and crimson. His hands are elongated, sinewy, and clawlike that taper into talon-like finger nails.
MANDARIN: ...or ME?
CAPTION: Next Month: The Mandarin Heralds The Beyond Dragons RETURN!!!
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I love the rings slowly dropping. Great way to build tension. Great set-up, but it feels a little hollow. Maybe 'cause I'm sadistic and wanted to see Mandarin beat up Stark.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you build tension with the sound and action of the rings being dropped.
ReplyDeleteSurely the Mandarin is cheating somewhat with his Dragon form though, right? :P
Totally agree with the others that use of the rings to slowly build tension and as a clue for your reveal was very well done.
ReplyDeleteI also like the set up of the pair being stripped back to no powers. It feels like a cocky move a villain such as the Mandarin would pull.
Nicely written page that suggest some intense theatrical lighting. Good work.
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