Monday, May 27, 2013

Planetary - Intergalactic - Ben Rosenthal



1. A close up of a pair of drumsticks tapping away on a bar. A few empty shot glasses are next to it. Off panel the bar tv is in a loop, simply saying the words 'intergalactic'.

CAPTION
New York City.  1997. A bar.


CAPTION (The Drummer)
Forced night off. I hate forced nights off.
Nothing to do but get drunk and mess with the locals.

SFX (drumsticks): taptaptaptap taptaptaptap

TV (off panel)
.....intergalactic.....intergalactic....


2. The Drummer is tapping away. The batman in the background soup on a stool hitting the tv as he cannot work out why it continues to repeat the same word.  The tv is showing a news reader doing a story on space travel.

BARMAN
Stupid piece of crap.

TV
.....intergalactic.....intergalactic....

CAPTION (The Drummer)
A bit of manipulating of the tv signal and I drive the bar owner nuts.
It's the small things that entertain.



3. We see three guys from behind as the approach and talk to The Drummer. He looks at the as the Tv in the bar behind him continues saying a single word on loop.

GUY 1
Hey man, we've been watching you tap away for the last half hour without dropping a beat.

GUY 2
We could use a guy like you. Want a job in the music biz?

CAPTION (The Drummer)
Ugh. Musicians.

THE DRUMMER
Thanks. Already have a job. I work for--

TV
.....intergalactic.....intergalactic....


4. Reveal of the four guys - it's Michael "Mike D" Diamond, Adam "MCA" Yauch and Adam "Ad-Rock" Horovitz -  the Beastie Boys. All have an expression on their face as an idea has popped into their heads.

TV
.....intergalactic.....

THE DRUMMER (off panel)
--Planetary.


6 comments:

  1. It's groanworthy and cheezy, but in a good way.

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  2. As MK says, it's cheesy, but just self-aware enough that it works. Although I think Drums would probably take up their offer, only to be eventually kicked out for getting on their nerves.

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  3. Haha. I had the song in my head from the get go, so it was pretty funny to see it paid off in the last panel.

    This seems to differ in tone from what I've seen of Planetary, but I'm a sucker for last panel payoffs.

    However, I was thrown by the Caped Crusader's appearance in Panel 2 :P

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  4. Ah, the Beasties. Although, personally, Paul's Boutique is my personal most dope fresh...RAPUNZEL, RAPUNZEL, LET DOWN YA HAIR...

    Cool script, yo.

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  5. Nice idea Ben. I wasn't expecting the boys to show up at the end :)

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  6. Like Dan i instantly had the song in my head and was so hoping you took the page in the direction you did. The idea is just crazy enough that I feel Ellis could have written it. haha.

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