Friday, May 10, 2013

The Escapist - Terror of the Terminal Time Trap! - J.D. Coughlan


Panel 1: Medium shot of a blank-walled white room. There is a chair in the exact middle, with the Escapist, just awoken, tied to it. Behind him is an open door. In the corner of the panel is clock text (ideally like a flip clock of the era).

ESCAPIST: Hmm.

CLOCK: 11:27:42

Panel 2: Same POV. The Escapist is standing in front of the chair and has undone his ropes. He is smug, but still confused as to his whereabouts.

ESCAPIST: That was simple enough.

CLOCK: 11:28:17

Panel 3: Same POV. The Escapist is about to walk out the door.

ESCAPIST: As death-traps go, this one is hardly very--

CLOCK: 11:28:21

Panel 4: Same POV. The Escapist is back to being tied up in the chair. He now has a worried expression on his face.

ESCAPIST: --complicated.

CLOCK: 11:27:42

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4 comments:

  1. (Ray stands and claps) Great Groundhog Day, that is the best trap of the week, J.D., and masterfully played for a fantastic payoff. You have earned your Golden Key, sir.

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  2. Hah! Nice. Simple and effective.

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  3. Excellent. Feels like things are just going to get weirder from hereon in. Put me in the mind of this: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C6U3fT2SBtI

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  4. Clever idea, set up and played out really over one page. Nice work.

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