(NAMOR the SUB-MARINER
is on the verge of one of his ‘Invade the surface world!’ binges again.)
(10 Panels)
(Since this page
probably looks a little crowded, I’m trying my hand at one of those panel
guidelines for it to help show how I’m thinking it might all be able to fit.)
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Panel 1: NAMOR is storming down a beach and halfway
into the water. STORM has flown to put herself in NAMOR’s path.
STORM: Namor, STOP!
NAMOR: Stand aside, woman.
Panel 2: NAMOR sweeps his hand aside to try to signal
for STORM to get out of his way.
NAMOR: You may control the weather, but I rule the sea!
Panel 3: Upward angled view of STORM as her eyes
begin to glow, intended to make her look more intimidating. Above her, the sky
begins to darken and clouds begin to form.
STORM: You doubt my powers out here?
Panel 4: Wide view of the surrounding area as a
miniature hurricane – miniature as in about as covering as small an area as is
possible – begins to form around the two.
Panel 5: View from inside a nearby city as people
begin to look towards the direction of the uniquely small storm that’s begin to
form off in the distance and the clouds that hang above in the sky. While the
winds aren’t very violent around them, there is sign that there’s far lesser
winds affecting them as well.
Panel 6: View from space of the general area
surrounding where NAMOR and STORM are standing, where it’s seen that as small
as the storm is, the clouds that are forming around it can still be seen from
space.
Panel 7: Image of a news program, where an anchor is
sitting at a desk with a picture of a hurricane up over his shoulder.
NEWS ANCHOR: This just in, there are reports of a freak,
miniature hurricane forming…
Panel 8: Panel returns to NAMOR as he stands in the
middle of the storm. He looks around, but in typical NAMOR style, he appears
unphased by STORM’s display.
Panel 9: The hurricane begins to break up as STORM
lets her powers subside. The white is gone from her eyes and there is now a
smile on her face.
STORM: Glad to know you’re able to listen to reason, Namor.
NAMOR: Of course…
Panel 10: STORM flies back past NAMOR towards shore
with the expectation that he intends to follow her. She’s largely off-panel at
the moment, though, as it largely focuses on NAMOR, who is still standing in
the water. He turns so that he can watch as STORM flies past her, the intent
being that he’s ‘checking her out’. There might be a small, cartoonish style
heart over his head to help emphasize the point that her display caused him to
become smitten with her.
NAMOR: …what kind of king would I be otherwise?
(END PAGE)
Nice little piece of characterisation on Namor at the end there, but for the displays of power, I think they do deserve more space.
ReplyDeleteHi MK. I think this page could definitely work at this density.
ReplyDeleteYou've laid out a 16 panel grid ala Dark Knight.
I enjoyed your showing how even the most localised weather manipulation by Storm has an almost global effect.
The jump between panel 8 and 9 threw me a bit. In 8 Namor look unphased so how has Storm inferred that Namor has backed down?
Maybe some indication from Namor, acknowledging Storms power, in panel 8 would sort this.
Yeah, it does appear I absolutely missed something in panels 8/9. I was aiming for the idea that Namor was backing down without loosing his arrogant nature, but it seems I completely missed the mark somewhere in there and now that you're bringing it up, it doesn't work at all the way I intended.
DeleteYour intention is still clear though. I imagine an artist would fill in the gap with an appropriate facial expression in p8
DeleteI definitely think this could work with the panel count given as the dialogue is at a premium.
ReplyDeleteI think that the last panel, with the right artist, would probably work without the dialogue. Just the notion of him checking her out would get across his motivations in stopping his current rampage.