Friday, July 26, 2013

Wolverine - Boys' Night In - Niel Jacoby

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Panel 1: Wolverine and Deadpool are sitting on opposite sides of a card table, with equal amounts of poker chips. Iceman is sitting between them, really nervous. Deadpool is moving some chips to the middle of the table.

Iceman: SO THIS IS WHAT YOU GUYS DO ON FRIDAY NIGHTS, HUH?

Wolverine: YEP.
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HOW MUCH YOU BETTIN', POOL?

Deadpool: 10.

Panel 2: Wolverine moves some chips to the middle.

Wolverine: I SEE YOUR 10 AND RAISE YOU 20.

Deadpool: I CALL.

Wolverine: SAME TOO. ROLL IT.

Panel 3: Deadpool spins the chamber of a revolver.

Deadpool: LAST CHANCE TO TAKE BACK YOUR BET, HAIR-BOY.

Wolverine: NO WAY, CHEETO BREATH.

Deadpool: OK.

Panel 4: Deadpool sticks the barrel in his mouth, pointing somewhat upward.

NO COPY

Panels 5-7: close ups on the three, Deadpool first, an incredibly nervous Iceman second, a steady calm Wolverine third.
Wolverine(p5): 1...
(p6): 2...
(p7):3.

Panel 8: Deadpool pulls the trigger, blowing his brains out. Iceman is horrified, Wolverine is smirking.

SFX: BLAAOW!

Iceman: OH MY GOD

Panel 9: Wolverine moves the pot over to his side. Iceman is still on edge as Deadpool's head is beginning to heal.

Deadpool: BHEEAH SHOOO AOOOOGH CHREE?*

Caption: *"BEST 2 OUT OF 3?"

5 comments:

  1. Oh my god, if this script is wrong, I don't wanna be right. The last two panels made me burst out loud. The fact that Iceman is your pivot character is choice...it even works in my head with the movie casting...I love black humour...great stuff, Niel...

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    1. Ditto to what RA said. This is a hilarious job of using their healing powers in a way I don't think I've seen before.

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  2. Some hilarious dark comedy here. Love it!

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  3. When a page makes another writer equal parts jealous and inspired you know you have a winner. This is just a pure genius piece of writing craft. Your characters, setting, premise and build up are all perfect. The three head shots with the countdown in particular really making the page pop for me.

    Oh and man captioning Deadpool at the end was a master stroke that put the biggest grin on my face.

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