Thursday, August 1, 2013

Adventure Time - Misadventure - J.D. Coughlan


Four wide horizontal panels.

Panel 1: Finn and Jake's kitchen. Finn is pouring himself a bowl of boring, sensible cereal while Jake sits at the table reading a newspaper.

JAKE: You see this? Public transport tax is going up.

FINN: Tch. Terrible.

Panel 2: Jake lowers the paper slightly as Finn sits at the table with his cereal.

JAKE: And what are they gonna do to improve the conditions of buses and trains? Nothing, of course.

FINN: Hmm.

Panel 3: Finn casually takes a spoonful of cereal as Jake looks off into the distance thoughtfully.

FINN: Anyway, have you given any more thought about what colour to paint the den?

JAKE: Oh, uh... Burnt amber? Although I am fond of the butterscotch.

Panel 4: A more photorealistic style. The writers of Adventure Time, including creator Pendleton Ward, sit in front of a TV displaying the previous scene. They all look bored.

WARD: Yeah, we should only write this while high.

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The author wishes to express that he is in no way condoning drug use as a creative aid, regardless of the thousands of examples of classics produced under the influence. Please write responsibly, no matter how boring it is. Or whatever, man, I ain't gonna tell you what to do.

3 comments:

  1. “You see, I think drugs have done some good things for us. I really do. And if you don't believe drugs have done good things for us, do me a favor. Go home tonight. Take all your albums, all your tapes and all your CDs and burn them. 'Cause you know what, the musicians that made all that great music that's enhanced your lives throughout the years were rrRREALLY high on drugs. The Beatles were so high, they let Ringo sing a few tunes.” - Bill Hicks.

    Great script by the way...

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  2. JD I really hope the end paragraph would actual be part of the page. It really sells the whole concept and for me made for the biggest smile of the whole script.

    Also I dig that you built up to the gag panel and didn't just dive for it. It sells your premise and punchline even more through the wait and see approach.

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