Sunday, September 29, 2013

Agent Coulson - The Greater Threat - Ben Rosenthal


I'd just like to point out that I am a massive Joss fan and love the way he writes.  Just clearing that up now.


1.  Agent Phil Coulson is walking in to the ops room of the S.H.E.I.L.D Helicarrier.  Maria is looking at a large screen with various readouts on it.  She stands with her hand on her chin, observing. 

CAPTION
When Agent Phil Coulson made his way into the Marvel Universe he brought something with him.
Whedon-speak.

COULSON
What’s the situation?

MARIA HILL
Things.


2.  Coulson and Hill are standing side by side, front on to the panel.  Hill still stands with her hand on her chin as she speaks.  Coulson is his usual stoic self. 

COULSON
Things?

MARIA HILL
Yeah, things.  And stuff.


3.  The two have not moved and continue their banter.

COULSON
Things with stuff!  Are the things mixed with the stuff or are they not mutually exclusive?

MARIA HILL
They’re testing the waters before they make a firm decision.

COULSON
So they are ice skating around their issues?

MARIA HILL
Ice snorkelling.  The waters aren’t firm yet.

COULSON
So they can’t break?

MARIA HILL
Yeah, so the baby isn’t on the way.

COULSON
What baby?


4.  Hill has her arms outstretched in a dramatic display as she shouts.  Coulson is reacting in a shocked way.

MARIA HILL
THE LORD UNDERDEATH!


5.  Coulson has regained his compsure.  Maria is posing as she did at the start of the story. 

COULSON
Oh.  Yay.   
And stuff.


5 comments:

  1. Okay, so, here's the thing... I've always-- Listen, I've always thought that Brian Michael Bendis and Joss Whedon have very similar-- Listen, I'm saying that they have very similar dialogue styles and stuff, okay? This is why-- Listen, this is why Whedon was perfect to write Avengers and Agents of SHIELD and you-- Listen, you capture it brilliantly here without being too mocking. Seriously. I know, right? Come on! Listen.

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  2. All I hear while reading your comment JD is Navi from Ocarina of Time.
    As such I want to throttle you.
    Oh, and thanks ;)

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  3. This is why I don't enjoy Whedon's comics. His dialogue works much better as audio. When it's like this, taking, what, 7 panels, to go literally nowhere, that just irks me in the most powerful way.

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