PAGE TWENTY ONE – 5
PANELS.
Layout
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21.1
Large panel. EXT
the Jean Grey institute for higher learning. It’s a beautiful, bright day but
full of destruction. The school is torn in two, floors and ceiling fall away,
and glass lies shattered everywhere. Smoke and fire billow towards the crisp,
clear blue sky.
Three Sentinels tower over the crumbling
school. One-sentinel steps through the massive caved in section of school that
was once the entrance hall.
In the foreground we see students running from the carnage. Two figures stand out though,
those of HISAKO ICHIKI (ARMOR) and LOGAN (WOLVERINE) Logan lies flat on his
back Hisako kneels at his side.
LOGAN:
Run girl. Get the
hell outta here.
21.2
Page wide panel. Pull
in on Logan and Hisako. Logan is bloody and cut to ribbons. His healing factor
slowly pulling him back into shape. Blood runs from his mouth. Hisako kneels at
his side. Her eyes wide and sad yet her teeth are gritted and her jaw is set, a
seething rage is hidden within.
LOGAN:
Soon as I’m
healed up I’ll take care of these tin cans.
HISAKO:
You ever heard
the saying go big or go home Logan?
LOGAN:
I never really know
what you kids are talking about these days.
HISAKO:
Well it’s that or option I don’t care for right now.
21.3
Small panel.
Tight on Hisako’s right hand has she makes a fist, her reddish armor shimmering
into life around it.
CAPTION HISAKO:
See I’m already
home.
21.4
Small panel. Tight
shot on Hisako’s face. She is facing straight at us. Her eyes closed, her face
calm. Her hair hangs long and free. The helmet of her armor becomes more solid
around her.
CAPTION HISAKO:
But I’ve got to
go big.
21.5
Small panel.
Tight on Hisako’s left hand that appears to be gripping tightly around an invisible
handle. The armor on this hand has fully formed.
CAPTION HISAKO:
Just to make sure
I still have that home.
The first panel is a strong opener. You establish the threat keenly, and I like that Logan is pretty much out of commission. The only thing I didn't sense was that emotional connection with him. It's almost as if you were showing more of her connection with the school.
ReplyDeleteStill, all in all, a well done page that looks like it would lead into something awesome...
Well written page. I like your opening fake and Logan's dialogue.
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