Thursday, September 12, 2013

Killeroo – Mad Marsupial – Shaun Richens.


PAGE FIVE – 6 PANELS.

5.1
Wide panel. We are on the side of a long dirt road in the Australian outback. The sun is just setting. Two dead bikers lay dead next to their rides. A third rider, LOBO, stands next to his hands raised high in the air.

This last remaining biker, Lobo, wears a dirty pair of black jeans, leather biker boots, a vest top that may have been white a long time ago, but is now a grey mess with holes in, and a leather waistcoat over the top. A badge stitched onto the waistcoat bears the symbol of a pichfork. With his arms raised his hairy beer belly hangs out. The shit-eating grin on his faces reveals that he only has a handful of teeth left and they are rotten and yellowed.

These men were/are the Pitchfork Pricks. A biker gang so vile they make the Vikings look like the Brady Bunch.

LOBO:
Haha. Well hot damn son.

5.2
Close up on LOBO. He tongues a gap in between his teeth as he speaks and wipes sweat off his forehead just above his eye.

LOBO:
It’s a fair cop mate. Ill bloody give ya that.

LOBO:
I’ll come along quite like.

5.3
Still close on Lobo. He is putting a big fat cigar to his lips. Holding a zippo lighter in the other hand close to the tip as he tries to light it.

LOBO:
Shame you had to kill me boys. But better them than me though, hey?

5.4
Lobo’s eyes have gone wide, his mouth a gasp. The cigar and zippo fall away.

SFX:
Bam bam.

5.5
Full body shot of Lobo. He clutches at his stomach trying to hold his guts in as blood pours from the shotgun wound in his torso.

LOBO:
*Wheeze*

5.6
Reveal of KILLEROO. He rests his shotgun like so on his shoulder. A small smile plays across his face.

KILLEROO:
Seems you pissed off the wrong people Lobo.

KILLEROO
Bounty’s tripled if I bring you in dead. 

2 comments:

  1. Great stuff - told a whole story in just one page! :)

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    1. Thanks for the kind words, it means a lot.

      Trying to tell a compelling story in just one page is the most fun and challenging concept to work on as a comic book writer,but its such good practise. When I get given 22 pages to work on I'll make every damn panel matter! :)

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