Thursday, September 19, 2013

Predator – Hot Damn I Love Hunting - Shaun Richens.


PAGE ONE – 5 PANELS.

1.1
We open in a dense woodland forest. Huge trees tower all around. Shafts of light from the bright morning sun escape into the forest through the thick canopy of trees.

A large and majestic adult STAG grazes on the vegetation in a small clearing.

NO COPY.

1.2
Repeat shot of 1.1. However how the Stag has looked up and towards us. A gunshot wound erupts at the base of the poor beasts neck. Blood sprays out towards us.

SFX:
BLAM

1.3
Cut to a slightly over weight “hick” in full camouflage gear including a cap. His faces is sweaty and covered with stubble, he has two streaks of camo paint on his cheeks. He smiles broadly on one side of his face showing his misshapen teeth.

The HICK peers out from behind the scope of his hunting rifle, the barrel pointed towards us. He is lying prone on his stomach in a thick patch of grass. He has been watching and waiting for his moment.

HICK:
Fuckin’ got ya.

1.4
Looking down through the branches of trees we see the Hick walking over to the carcass of his prize stag. Deep red blood has begun to pool around the stag.

NO COPY.

1.5
Repeat of 1.4. However now the Hick kneels at the side of the stag and we reveal the shimmering outline of a PREDATOR crouching in the treetops looking down on his prize, watching, waiting.

HICK:
Hot damn I love hunting. 

3 comments:

  1. Excellent cathartic script. It left me thinking, "Yeah, how do you like it?"

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  2. Nice script Shaun. This guy seems like easier prey than the Predators usually go for, but I imagine he or his hunting mates would prove themselves more a match as the story progressed.

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  3. That poor SOB. A nice little piece that concisely illustrates that man isn't necessarily as mighty as he might choose to believe.

    Additionally, I can't help but imagine the panel where the Predator makes the same claim and subsequently gets taken out by something even more badass.

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