Wednesday, September 25, 2013

The Twilight Zone – Zoned Out – MK Stangeland Jr.

(9 Panels)

Panel 1: A young man – JIMMY – is sitting in front of a TV. He’s wearing a TWILIGHT ZONE shirt.

NARRATION: Meet Jimmy – a man with a love for a certain TV show. But he’s about to learn that the truth of this TV show might not be what he might expect as he finds himself in – The Twilight Zone!

Panel 2: JIMMY is wide-eyed with shock and surprise as what he’s seeing on his TV isn’t at all what he expected.

TV: Previously on The Twilight Zone, our heroes found themselves caught in the middle as Werewolves and Vampires came to the brink of war!

Panel 3: Close-up on JIMMY’s face as he shouts in horror.


Panel 4: JIMMY sits up as he wakes up from what was seemingly a nightmare. However, it’s quite clear that something is very wrong because as it so happens, JIMMY looks like a pony in the style of MY LITTLE PONY: FRIENDSHIP IS MAGIC, and is located inside of TWILIGHT SPARKLE’s library treehouse.

JIMMY: Whew, what a nightmare!

Panel 5: JIMMY has another look of shock on his face as he looks to see TWILIGHT SPARKLE standing nearby, who looks a tad confused by how JIMMY is acting.

TWILIGHT SPARKLE (1): What was a nightmare.

JIMMY (1): …

JIMMY (2): What? Where am I?

TWILIGHT SPARKLE (2): My Treehouse Library?

JIMMY (3): Who are you?

TWILIGHT SPARKLE (3): Twilight Sparkle?

Panel 6: Another close-up on JIMMY as he yells in horror at his prediciment.


Panel 7: JIMMY, in a bed, sit up as he yet again wakes up.


Panel 8: Distance panel, showing JIMMY sitting in a bed that is located practically in the middle of nowhere, a wilderness that is lit by an ever setting sun, keeping the whole place permanently lit in twilight.


Panel 9: Match to PANEL 8.

JIMMY: What?



  1. Nice russian doll/twist within a twist type structure.

    I like the silent beat at the end too.

  2. I like the repeating dream within a dream bit. Reminds me a lot of our Rarebit Fiend week.


Feedback is what every good writer wants and needs, so please provide it in the white box below
If you want to play along at home, feel free to put your scripts under the Why? post for the week.