Friday, October 11, 2013

Kate Bishop is Hawkeye in - Moving Target - Niel Jacoby

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Panel 1: Kate Bishop, in normal dress, is locking the door of Clint's Bed-Stuy apartment. She does not have her bow and arrows with her.

NO COPY

Panel 2: Two men are sitting in a forest green Cadillac Eldorado. Think this. The man in the driver's seat, the arranger, is a dark-haired man in black sunglasses wearing a Bluetooth headset. The man in the passenger's seat, the client, is a pudgy, middle-aged man, the kind of man you could imagine leading a company in the Honorable Mentions of the Fortune 500. He's wearing coke-bottle glasses. They both are wearing all black tactical gear and are packing heat. There's an attache case on the client's lap.

Arranger: THE BOSS WANTS 50 MILLION UP FRONT, AND A SECOND 50 IF YOU MAKE THE KILL. I'LL ASSUME YOU'VE GOT THE FULL HUNDRED IN THAT CASE?

Client: Y-YES.

Arranger: GOOD. THEN WHEN SHE WALKS OUT THAT DOOR...

Panel 3: an archer stands in the window at the end of the hallway where Kate is exiting the door.

Caption(Arranger): "... THE HUNT BEGINS."

Panel 4: The archer looses an arrow.

SFX: TWINNG!

Panel 5: The arrow lands about a foot in front of Kate's face, as a banner unfurls, reading:

THINK FAST:
YOUR LIFE DEPENDS ON IT

Panel 6: A map of the area around Hawkeye's apartment. There is a mile radius around the apartment shaded purple, with the area around it a light blue. In the legend, the purple should be "Danger Zone" and the blue is "home free". There should be a marker for the target range Kate has her arrows stored, at about halfway between the apartment and the line dividing Danger Zone and home free. Kate's location is marked with a small pictogram of her face, and the client and arranger's location should be marked with a set of sunglasses identical to those worn by the Arranger.

3 comments:

  1. Cool page Niel. Would be cool to see the map updated with icons as the story progressed.

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  2. Another great example of Fraction and Aja's style here, with the map. Nice premise behind it too, with Kate turning the tables.

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  3. Smart page. Here's what I like about your pages in general, you're very adept at the "show, don't tell" rule - well crafted, and yes, agreed, you channel Aja's strengths very well.

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