PANEL ONE
An establishing shot of a New York apartment building. It's 1933, midday. The sun is beaming down on the six police cruisers parked out front. Uniformed cops are mulling about outside. There's a media presence, kept at bay by police tape.
An establishing shot of a New York apartment building. It's 1933, midday. The sun is beaming down on the six police cruisers parked out front. Uniformed cops are mulling about outside. There's a media presence, kept at bay by police tape.
CAPTION
The daylight means something.
PANEL TWODetective Lemonski - new character, don't go Googling - is trudging up the narrow staircase. Dressed like a 1930s cop would be. There're beads of sweat on his brow, a grimace on his face.
CAPTION (1)
I was thinkin' this before I knew the victim.
CAPTION (2)Don't get many calls durin' the day.
The scum saves its worst for when the lights're out.
The scum saves its worst for when the lights're out.
PANEL THREE
Lemonski has reached the third floor. A door marked 3C is open. There's a cop presence up here too, all ashen faced.
CAPTION (1)
Lot of blue, so I know this is a cut above my usual fare.
CAPTION (2)
I'm thinkin' it's a city official. Maybe the mayor.
PANEL FOUR
Tight on Lemonski's face. Despite the murder scene and the sweat on his face, there's a hint of a smile.
CAPTION (1)
I'm thinkin' that wouldn't be so bad.
CAPTION (2)
A case t'make my name.
PANEL FIVE
Inside the apartment there are four corpses tied to chairs. They are all wearing The Shadow's iconic garb. And each has suffered a double-tap to the chest.
LEMONSKI
Aw Christ.
CAPTION (1)
Yeah.
CAPTION (2)
The mayor would've been better.
Really great set-up you've established. Real pulp mystery feel, and the pov character is well placed to walk us through it. Cool stuff.
ReplyDeleteAmazing set-up, building to that powerful reveal, which just makes me want to know more.
ReplyDeleteLike the others have said - very clever set up. Nice page!
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