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1.1
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wide panel. We open in a down and out dive bar, the kinda place c
list spidey villains would hang out to seem like the cool guys.
BOOMERANG,
OVERDRIVE, BEETLE, SPEED DEMON and SHOCKER all sit around a table in
the centre of the bar.
They are
all in costume and nursing half finished drinks.
We can
see the bar behind them. An old CTR Tv is up on the wall in the far
corner of the bar. A news report is currently on.
SHOCKER:
I know
what you're all thinking and its not my fault.
1.2
Cut to a
close up on Speed demon, he is massaging his forehead with two
fingers, he can feel a migraine coming on.
SPEED
DEMON:
Its all
your $*%@£&! fault pal.
1.3
Cut back
to shocker, he looks as hurt and defenceless as a dude in a full face
mask can.
SHOCKER:
My guy
told me they where moving a lot product.
SHOCKER:
And to
be fair, they were.
1.4
Close up
on Boomerang.
BOOMERANG:
Everyone
shut up. We need to make a pact right here, right now.
BOOMERANG:
We never
speak of this to anyone. Ever.
1.5
Repeat
of 1.1. Page wide panel, the whole crew sat around. The news report
is still playing in the background.
EVERYONE:
Agreed.
1.6
Cut to
close up on the TV. A well dressed news-reporter stands on the side
of a busy street. Behind her cornered off with police tape is a large
truck. The back doors hang on their hinges wide open.
REPORTER:
You join
me live downtown on the scene of one of the most unusual crimes this
city has ever seen.
REPORTER:
Earlier on today, this truck transporting sperm samples to the new state of the art
sperm bank was set upon my a band of masked robbers.
1.7
Pull in
even closer on the TV. In the upper corner of the screen are now the
mug shots of all five of our would be “bank robbers”.
REPORTER:
These
are the five suspects believed to have been involved in the incident.
1.8
Page
wide panel. The crew sat slumped at their table. A YOUNG MAN stands
at the bar pointing at them his eyes wide, a huge grin on his face.
YOUNG
MAN:
Guys
look, its the great sperm robbers.
Wow. Just...wow. Seriously funny, painfully groan-worthy, fantastic set-up through pitch perfect dialogue. Just...
ReplyDeleteWow.
Spectacular build-up, in which you get your characters across very well in the limited time, and that pay-off is hilarious.
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