PAGE ONE – 8 PANELS.
Page wide panel. We open in a down and out dive bar, the kinda place c list spidey villains would hang out to seem like the cool guys.
BOOMERANG, OVERDRIVE, BEETLE, SPEED DEMON and SHOCKER all sit around a table in the centre of the bar.
They are all in costume and nursing half finished drinks.
We can see the bar behind them. An old CTR Tv is up on the wall in the far corner of the bar. A news report is currently on.
I know what you're all thinking and its not my fault.
Cut to a close up on Speed demon, he is massaging his forehead with two fingers, he can feel a migraine coming on.
Its all your $*%@£&! fault pal.
Cut back to shocker, he looks as hurt and defenceless as a dude in a full face mask can.
My guy told me they where moving a lot product.
And to be fair, they were.
Close up on Boomerang.
Everyone shut up. We need to make a pact right here, right now.
We never speak of this to anyone. Ever.
Repeat of 1.1. Page wide panel, the whole crew sat around. The news report is still playing in the background.
Cut to close up on the TV. A well dressed news-reporter stands on the side of a busy street. Behind her cornered off with police tape is a large truck. The back doors hang on their hinges wide open.
You join me live downtown on the scene of one of the most unusual crimes this city has ever seen.
Earlier on today, this truck transporting sperm samples to the new state of the art sperm bank was set upon my a band of masked robbers.
Pull in even closer on the TV. In the upper corner of the screen are now the mug shots of all five of our would be “bank robbers”.
These are the five suspects believed to have been involved in the incident.
Page wide panel. The crew sat slumped at their table. A YOUNG MAN stands at the bar pointing at them his eyes wide, a huge grin on his face.
Guys look, its the great sperm robbers.
Wow. Just...wow. Seriously funny, painfully groan-worthy, fantastic set-up through pitch perfect dialogue. Just...ReplyDelete
Spectacular build-up, in which you get your characters across very well in the limited time, and that pay-off is hilarious.ReplyDelete