Thursday, January 30, 2014

D4ve – Electric Sheep – Shaun Richens.

PAGE ONE – 5 PANELS

1.1
PAGE WIDE PANEL. A monstrously large alien beast lies unconscious in the road. Smashed and abandoned cars line the street.

D4VE stands atop the beast in full hero mode. He looks confident and cool, he casually leans his elbow on the butt of an infeasibly big chrome gun.

A crowd has gathered. They listen silently as D4ve speaks. Looking up at him like a god.

D4VE:
...And the day is won.
Once again metal is mightier than flesh.

1.2
PAGE WIDE PANEL. Repeat of 1.1 The crowd have erupted into cheers and chanting.

D4VE has dropped his head, looking to the floor. His eye closed. One arm raised in the air fist closed (Think Judd Nelson at the end of The Breakfast Club) D4ve is loving every, single second of this.

THE CROWD:
D4VE. D4VE. D4VE. D4VE.

1.3
Close up on hero D4VE.

S4LLY(O.P):
D4ve

1.4
The blurry outline of S4LLY as she leans over the couch. We're looking at her from the couch. From D4VES POV.

S4LLY:
Boot the fuck up D4ve, you're guna be late for work.

1.5
Birds eye view. Looking straight down onto D4VE. He lies on the couch. One arm behind his head. He's still wearing his shirt from the day before.

D4VE:
Job damn.

1 comment:

  1. Great page Shaun. The opening panel is very Starship Troopers. And I love "Boot the fuck up" :D

    In 1.4 I think it would be great if D4VE's vision was pixelated instead of blurred.

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