God damn this was a silly page! I loved it! The dialogue plays out as oddball and strange but only works because of how tightly its written, every beat and word is bang on point. Furthermore in 6 panels, you se us up, had a caption panel, flashback and wrap up. That is great comic craft. Oh and man having a character speaking from off panel in 6 was a sweet move, you owned the art and you story work around it. A tip of the cap to you my man.
5/5 stars (You would have gotten 5 just for the line "I have some pretty sweet coats and only so many torsos to wear them on" but it helps I loved the rest of the script too.)
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I can't say I've ever thought that I wish someone else had a coat to share with me, either. I tend to make sure I'm wearing plenty of my own.
ReplyDeleteGod damn this was a silly page! I loved it! The dialogue plays out as oddball and strange but only works because of how tightly its written, every beat and word is bang on point. Furthermore in 6 panels, you se us up, had a caption panel, flashback and wrap up. That is great comic craft. Oh and man having a character speaking from off panel in 6 was a sweet move, you owned the art and you story work around it. A tip of the cap to you my man.
ReplyDelete5/5 stars (You would have gotten 5 just for the line "I have some pretty sweet coats and only so many torsos to wear them on" but it helps I loved the rest of the script too.)