The Story Thus Far: A
fat man wearing red and a thin man wearing green, both with mustaches, stole
DONKEY KONG’s golden bananas and kidnapped DIDDY KONG and DIXIE KONG. DK
kidnapped PRINCESS PEACH in turn hoping it would get MARIO and LUIGI to return
his bananas. MARIO and LUIGI, not having the golden bananas, first mistakenly
went after Bowser before realizing who really kidnapped her.
(7 Panels)
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Panel 1: DONKEY KONG, CRANKY KONG, MARIO, and LUIGI
are all frozen in place as PRINCESS PEACH shouts at them from off panel. They
are all in the exact same position they were just a moment ago when their fight
was ongoing, except for that their attention is now focused towards PEACH.
CRANKY KONG is on
LUIGI’s back and has him in a half-nelson, with a free arm holding his cane
over LUIGI’s head from where he’s been repeatedly smacking the plumber upside
the head with it.
MARIO is suspended
mid-air from a jump attack he was about to hit DONKEY KONG with, while DONKEY
KONG just slammed his fists against the ground in an unsuccessful attack
against MARIO.
PRINCESS PEACH: !!!
Panel 2: PRINCESS PEACH, who is currently in a bamboo
cage that is hanging in the air from the ceiling. She looks one part upset and
one part confused.
PRINCESS PEACH (1): [DK’s
head]!
PRINCESS PEACH (2): [Golden
Banana]?
Panel 3: MARIO is now standing on the ground next to
DONKEY KONG. He looks at DONKEY KONG with a determined, unhappy face. DONKEY
KONG looks angrily at PRINCESS PEACH (off-panel) and points at MARIO as he
explains.
DONKEY KONG (1): [Golden
Banana]!
DONKEY KONG (2): [A
fat mustached man wearing red and a tall mustached man wearing green.]
DONKEY KONG (3): [The
two men from (2) greedily carrying off a pile of Golden Bananas.]
DONKEY KONG (4): [DIDDY
KONG and DIXIE KONG in cages with the two men from (2) standing next to them.]
Panel 4: MARIO and LUIGI look at each other. CRANKY
KONG is still on LUIGI’s back and is looking down at him.
MARIO & LUIGI: [A
fat mustached man wearing red and a tall mustached man wearing green]?!
Panel 5: MARIO and LUIGI both actively try to think
about who it could be since neither of them are guilty of what DONKEY KONG is
describing.
MARIO & LUIGI: Hmmm…
Panel 6: MARIO and LUIGI both come to the same
realization.
MARIO & LUIGI: [Lightbulb]!!!
Panel 7: MARIO and LUIGI stand next to each other in
front of PRINCESS PEACH’s cage. CRANKY KONG is no longer on LUIGI’s back and
stands next to DONKEY KONG instead.
MARIO: [Wario]!!!
LUIGI: [Waluigi]!!!
DONKEY KONG & CRANKY KONG: !!!
PRINCESS PEACH: !
(END PAGE)
The pictographic dialogue really elevates what could have been a mundane story plot into something very entertaining, and actually gives everything a more playful feel to the piece. Clever script all around.
ReplyDeleteI really dig this script, MK. A really fun story idea executed in an equally brilliant way. It all feels very Paper Mario to me, which is definitely a good thing. Plus, you have some of the most amusing business going on in these panels. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThis whole picture in a speech bubble technique you have employed a fews times is always entertaining and always pulled off perfectly. You keep the panels tight and light. The whole thing just screams fun.
ReplyDelete5/5