Wednesday, June 18, 2014

Velvet Templeton – Didn’t See That Coming – MK Stangeland Jr.


(6 Panels)

Panel 1: The headquarters of a criminal organization. The organizations LEADER and an OFFICER are standing next to a table covered in various planning materials, including numerous papers.

TELEVISON: …are unsure as to who was behind the failed attack, but did state that it is currently their top priority.

Panel 2: The LEADER turns to the OFFICER.

LEADER: Explain to me again how our carefully and brilliantly constructed plan to assassinate the very head of ARC-7 itself failed?

Panel 3: The OFFICER gets defensive as he tries to avoid getting any further ire thrown his way.

OFFICER: It was his secretary! Somehow she made a mockery of the entire operation!

Panel 4: The LEADER facepalms.

LEADER: And nobody, not once, ever considered she might come into play somehow?

OFFICER: We didn’t have anything to give us reason to suspect…

Panel 5: The LEADER flips the table over in a burst of rage.

LEADER: WELL THEN SOMEONE ROYALLY &%$#^* UP BIG-TIME!

Panel 6: The LEADER rushes to get in the OFFICER’s face.

LEADER: OUR ENTIRE OPERATION – OUR ENTIRE ORGANIZATON – IS IN JEPORDY OF BEING COMPROMISED BECAUSE EVERYONE THOUGHT IT WOULD BE A GOOD IDEA TO WRITE OFF HIS SECRETARY AS A NOBODY!

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1 comment:

  1. I like the idea of the reader knowing who the secretary is, and do like that Velvet doesn't appear but the page is very much all about her.
    The only thing that didn't sit well with me is the dialogue. It seems a tad too expositionary (unless that is what you were going for - Bond Villain dialogue). I feel with some tightening up of the dialogue and perhaps combining one or two of the panels this could be a really tight page.

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