Friday, June 20, 2014

Velvet - Two Roads Converged - Niel Jacoby

Full Splash: Interior of a normal-seeming office building, in a corner office. It is obviously after hours, and the only light is moonlight shining in through the windows. Velvet Templeton is opening the door of the office just in time to notice Nick Fury, Agent Of Shield lowering himself in from an air duct. They are both surprised to see the other.

1 comment:

  1. I'm a big fan of splash pages finishing off an issue. This strikes me as one of those occasions. However I would personally like to see someone other than Nick Fury. If it had been another spy - perhaps one we had not seen before, it would give more gravitas to the page. A splash page is special - it's impactful. If this was the final page of an issue, and you made a big deal about a spy having the audacity to break in on Velvet (or steal her gig - it's not very clear) it would have the reader hooked.
    As it stands, this pages does leave me lacking in interest.


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