Thursday, August 21, 2014

Andrew Bennett - To Catch a Thief - J.D. Coughlan


Panel 1: A dark bedroom. It is night outside the open window, with the curtains flowing in the breeze. There is a body in the bed, under the sheets. In the dark corner, a face is half-illuminated. It is Skinner Sweet (from American Vampire). His eyes are cruel and he bares his fangs in a grin.

SWEET: (small) Never smile at a crocodile...

Panel 2: Skinner walks out of the dark corner, towards the bed, still grinning wickedly.

SWEET: (small) Don't be taken in by his welcome grin...

Panel 3: Over Skinner's shoulder as he looms over the bed, reaching out a hand to the sheet. We cannot see who is in the bed in the darkness.

SWEET: (small) He's imagining you inside his skin...

SWEET: (small) No, you nev...er...

Panel 4: The sheet thrown back to reveal Andrew Bennett. He grins and points a revolver (loaded with gold bullets, of course) at Skinner.

BENNETT: Smile.

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2 comments:

  1. Ben RosenthalAugust 23, 2014 at 9:27 AM

    This. Just this. Wow JD. Script of the week for me.
    Skinner reciting the child's poem conjures up images that the room could belong to a child - giving Skinner a creepy vibe. Of course you know where the twist was headed, but that is what makes it so damn cool - you want the pay off, and you give it. That's the thing with twist endings, sometimes when executed simply and well it pays off more than a complete 180 degree shock. Fantastic script mate.

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  2. MK Stangeland Jr.August 25, 2014 at 3:56 AM

    Muah ha ha ha ha

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