Friday, September 12, 2014
Invisible Woman – Indomitable – Travis M. Holyfield
Panel 1: Susan Richards, The Invisible Woman, stands facing Mentallo. Her fists are clenched, and her mouth is set in a determined grimace. Beads of sweat dot her forehead. Mentallo's helmet emits a (Kirby) crackle of energy.
MENTALLO: You're only hurting yourself, Mrs. Richards.
MENTALLO: A.I.M. has improved my psycho-helmet. It's boosting my powers to levels even Charles Xavier never reached.
Panel 2: Focus on Mentallo's face. His helmet continues to pulse with energy as he smiles a cocksure grin.
MENTALLO: Please just open your husband's lab for me, before your brain dissolves into taffy.
Panel 3: Continuation of previous panel. Mentallo's helmet continues to pulse, but he's no longer smiling. Sweat is starting to pour down his face, and he looks panicked.
MENTALLO: How.. how are you resisting? It's...
MENTALLO Your willpower... Never seen anything like...
Panel 4: Susan thrusts her hands towards Mentallo. A cylinder of invisible force extends from her hands to smash Mentallo against a wall.
Panel 5: Sue takes a moment to collect herself. She leans against a wall, breathing deeply. Mentallo lies in a crumpled heap on the floor.
SUSAN RICHARDS: Willpower?
SUSAN RICHARDS: I've been married to Reed Richards for ten years and I haven't smothered him in his sleep with a pillow.
Panel 6: Susan steps over Mentallo's unconscious body, striding boldly towards her next challenge.
SUSAN RICHARDS: You have NO idea what willpower is.
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I got a good laugh out of this. X^D.ReplyDelete
I really dig this, Travis. An excellent look at Sue's strength as a character, with a solid build throughout. My one suggestion would be to perhaps change Sue collecting herself in panel 5. It might be a tad much for showing how amazing / strong she is, but for a one-pager, your dialogue would almost lead one to expect it.ReplyDelete