Monday, September 29, 2014

Ms Marvel - What's on the Inside - Ben Rosenthal

1.  Kamala Khan is walking home from school in her civilian clothes.  In front of her so the reader sees his back) a man in a fedora and a trench coat is approaching her.

Excuse me Ms Khan.

Yeah.  Ohmygoodness!  It's you---

2.  Reverse angle of the previous panel.  The man in the fedora is Scott Summers.


Not so loud Ms Khan.  I need to talk to you about your powers.

3. Closer on Cyclops, however the oversized fist of Kamala is punching him right in the face.

Mutant or Inhuman, your gift can he--OMFF

Give me a break 'Cyke'.

4.  A high angle.  Kamala is standing over Cyclops.  However he has began to shape shift into Mystique.

I can spot shifting molecules a mile away.

1 comment:

  1. I like the concept, but it feels a little rushed. Kamala going from fangirling out over meeting Cyclops to punching him in the face the next panel feels a little jarring, and while the explanation definitely works from a comic book superhero logic perspective, I think even having one panel to show Kamala's realization / transition would benefit the page.


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