Monday, September 15, 2014
Shade the Changing Man - Who I use to be - Ben Rosenthal
1. A busy suburban street at night. Shadows of street lamps line the walls as people hurry about.
CAPTION
I've got no body.
Both figuratively and physically.
2. Kathy is walking along a path, head down. She doesn't want to be noticed and just wants to get to her destination.
CAPTION
I gave up everything for her. Everything.
3. Side on view of Kathy walking past one of the street lamps, it's shadow up against the wall.
CAPTION
And now all I can do is watch from afar.
4. The same as Panel 3, but Kathy is almost out of the panel. However, a shadow is stepping out of the street lamp shadow, yes there is no one there. This is Shade - he has no body an lives just in the shadows of this world.
CAPTION
A shadow of the man I use to be.
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There's a lot to recommend this page, Ben. The basic idea makes for an interesting premise and the building is well paced. The first panel does strike me as a little off though - the two lines feel a little abrupt and overdone compared to how well the rest of the captions flow. Banging that up would really make this page sing.
ReplyDeleteWhat sells this page is the sense of mood. It's noir with a very thick atmosphere of dread. A true "shade" in an urban "Ghost" by way of "DOA" setting. I'd love to know where this goes from here...
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