In Sex Criminals' trademark 4x4 panel layout:
0012 (i.e. two spots for panel 10 and one for 11 and 12)
1 - Jon and Suzie swept up and lost in the sheets in the midst of having sex (with said sheets tastefully placed to maintain everyone's dignity).
CAPTION (SUZIE): In those early days, Jon and I were having sex pretty much constantly.
2 - Suzie and Jon sit at a table in a restaurant. They're eating brunch (let's say Jon's having some variety of French toast, while Suzie has a classic bacon, toast, and eggs). Jon is digging into his food, while Suzie sits partially turned on her chair, addressing the reader directly.
SUZIE: But if we ever managed to pull ourselves apart from our advanced face sucking for more than five minutes, we'd get brunch.
3 - Suzie's attention is distracted by a server walking by with a big tray of plates.
SUZIE: I've always loved brunch.
4 - The panel focus follows said tray, displaying a wealth of brunch plates and options. There's eggs, pancakes, fruit, breakfast burritos, steak frites - really whatever floats your brunch boat.
CAPTION (SUZIE): There's just so many options to choose from. So many ways to enjoy it and to share it with others.
5 - Back to Suzie and Jon. Jon has some French toast on his fork and feeds it to Suzie (kind of suddenly). It's very subtle, but the background starts to look a bit like things do when time stops (colours, faded, etc).
CAPTION (SUZIE): Maybe this sounds weird, but it can be kind of intimate, in its own way.
6 - Jon gives Suzie a winning smile. Suzie smiles back bashfully. The time stoppage effects are becoming a bit more obvious.
CAPTION (SUZIE): Well, it can be with the right person.
7 - Suzie reciprocates Jon's action, feeding him some bacon and eggs. Things are getting close to looking like the time stoppage - the background is fading out almost completely.
CAPTION (SUZIE): And before I met Jon, it was the closest thing to The Quiet that I could share with anyone else.
8 - Get rid of the time stoppage effect completely. Jon and Suzie are back in the restaurant with nothing amiss. Their actions are a spiritual repetition of panel 6, with Suzie and Jon once again switching roles. If they weren't clearly so into each other, it would be sickeningly sweet.
CAPTION (SUZIE): Time would never stop.
9 - Suzie moves to hold Jon's hand. They smile at each other.
CAPTION (SUZIE): But a good brunch could slow it down a bit.
10 - Repeat panel 9.
11 - Still hand holding, Suzie looks surprised / like she's just thought of something. She looks back at the reader.
SUZIE (1): Now where was I?
SUZIE (2): Oh, right...
12 - The traditional all caps white text on black background that Sex Criminals uses to switch scenes.
WHITE TEXT: THE TIME JON AND SUZIE TRIED TO DO IT IN THE SHOWER
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