(6 Panels)
Panel 1: An alien thief – DATTZ ZATZZ (New character)
– is in the starship equivalent of a hot-rod. He has the look of a cool, smooth
talker. His ship is in space, next to an orbital check point over HAWKWORLD. On
the screen in front of him is THANDRIS (New Character), a police officer from
THANAGAR. She should have a measure of obvious attractiveness, but not to an
overplayed degree, especially since she’s in uniform.
THANDRIS: Do you have anything to declare, Sir?
Panel 2: ZATZZ looks at the screen as if he’s trying
to flirt with THANDRIS, not aware about what’s actually going on.
ZATZZ (1): How about that I think you might have stolen my
heart.
ZATZZ (2): Tell me, you come over here from nearby
Hotsworld?
Panel 3: THANDRIS look at ZATTZ, a serious face that
is in no way amused or taken in by ZATZZ words.
THANDRIS (2): Sir, do you understand that this is a very
serious matter that should not be taken lightly?
Panel 4: ZATZZ looks confused and concerned.
ZATZZ (1): Wow, this place got real serious all of the
sudden.
ZATZZ (2): Like when did Halkworld add a checkpoint?
THANDRIS (1): Halkworld? That criminal scum of a planet?
THANDRIS (2): Sir, this is Thanagar, Hawkworld.
Panel 5: Beat Panel. ZATZZ had a blank-eyed look of
horror on his face as he realizes the mistake he’s made.
Panel 6: ZATZZ is flying his ship away from HAWKWORLD
at top-speed, a number of THANAGAR police ship in hot pursuit with weapons
firing as they try to chase him down.
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I really like the idea, but am I mistaken in thinking you meant Hockworld? I mean, that is definitely what comes across based on your dialogue and description, but the Halk did throw me for a loop (unless, of course, I simply am missing something as to what a Halk is).
ReplyDeleteAlso like the final two silent panels. They make for an excellent one-two punchline.
See also: Hotsworld is a solid side joke.
Yeah, what I meant was "Hockworld", but for the life of me I couldn't figure out what the correct spelling was supposed to be. So I settled on going with what I hoped would be close enough an approximation to get the idea across.
DeleteHA!
ReplyDeleteI love every steady beat of this page. You keep the humour on that low burner so that when we hit those silent "wrong turn at Albuquerque" panels, yo just know a good artist would make them shine. Well done, MK!