Wednesday, February 11, 2015

Hawkworld – Wrong Turn Detour – MK Stangeland Jr.

(6 Panels)

Panel 1: An alien thief – DATTZ ZATZZ (New character) – is in the starship equivalent of a hot-rod. He has the look of a cool, smooth talker. His ship is in space, next to an orbital check point over HAWKWORLD. On the screen in front of him is THANDRIS (New Character), a police officer from THANAGAR. She should have a measure of obvious attractiveness, but not to an overplayed degree, especially since she’s in uniform.

THANDRIS: Do you have anything to declare, Sir?

Panel 2: ZATZZ looks at the screen as if he’s trying to flirt with THANDRIS, not aware about what’s actually going on.

ZATZZ (1): How about that I think you might have stolen my heart.

ZATZZ (2): Tell me, you come over here from nearby Hotsworld?

Panel 3: THANDRIS look at ZATTZ, a serious face that is in no way amused or taken in by ZATZZ words.

THANDRIS (2): Sir, do you understand that this is a very serious matter that should not be taken lightly?

Panel 4: ZATZZ looks confused and concerned.

ZATZZ (1): Wow, this place got real serious all of the sudden.

ZATZZ (2): Like when did Halkworld add a checkpoint?

THANDRIS (1): Halkworld? That criminal scum of a planet?

THANDRIS (2): Sir, this is Thanagar, Hawkworld.

Panel 5: Beat Panel. ZATZZ had a blank-eyed look of horror on his face as he realizes the mistake he’s made.

Panel 6: ZATZZ is flying his ship away from HAWKWORLD at top-speed, a number of THANAGAR police ship in hot pursuit with weapons firing as they try to chase him down.



  1. I really like the idea, but am I mistaken in thinking you meant Hockworld? I mean, that is definitely what comes across based on your dialogue and description, but the Halk did throw me for a loop (unless, of course, I simply am missing something as to what a Halk is).

    Also like the final two silent panels. They make for an excellent one-two punchline.

    See also: Hotsworld is a solid side joke.

    1. Yeah, what I meant was "Hockworld", but for the life of me I couldn't figure out what the correct spelling was supposed to be. So I settled on going with what I hoped would be close enough an approximation to get the idea across.

  2. HA!
    I love every steady beat of this page. You keep the humour on that low burner so that when we hit those silent "wrong turn at Albuquerque" panels, yo just know a good artist would make them shine. Well done, MK!


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