(I ultimately decided
this week to pull directly from a script I wrote years ago but has done little
except collect e-dust on my hard drive since then. It’s more of the ROBOT
VIKING NINJA PIRATES that I wrote about way back during the ‘Our Own Creations’
week, though this time I’m using previously written material.
The important relevant
information is that CAPTAIN ODIN and members of his crew are attempting to
steal from a library in TOKOTO, NIPPON. On
the previous page, ODIN was attacked by OTAKA HAKA XAN, the head librarian, who
used a ‘CHI-FU’ technique (basically martial arts with glowy energy-infused
attacks).
Page 10 (6 Panels)
Panel 1: ODIN, having fallen
to the floor, begins to pick himself up.
ODIN: (Quietly, to himself.) Unholy :-O :-O :-O :-O!
Panel 2: ODIN, still with
swords in hand, cups his hands around his mouth in a contradictory attempt to
both whisper and shout at XAN.
ODIN: (Loud whispering.) < That was amazing! You have got to tell me how you do that! >
Panel 3: XAN is using the
shelves to wall jump to higher ground so he can chase after MIMIR.
Panel 4: A ninja star hits
the shelf where XAN was about to put his hand, causing him to stop short.
Panel 5: ODIN hits XAN with a
flying kick, knocking him off the shelves.
SFX: wam!
ODIN: (Whispering.) < Oh no, you don’t. >
Panel 6: Both ODIN and XAN
land on their feet. ODIN is in the foreground.
ODIN: (Whispering.)
< You already picked your fight. You’re staying right here with me. >
(END PAGE)
Don't know much of the overall story, but this page flows really nicely. Some nice action and quick dialogue to keep everything moving at a rapid clip.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I dig the whisper-shouting. Solid.