(I really wanted to go with something better than a simple pun script this week, but sometimes you work with what you’re able to come up with rather than what you want to write.)
Panel 1: BETA RAY BILL is attempting to speak to THOR, SIF, and the WARRIORS THREE. He looks a touch distressed.
BETA RAY BILL: …
SIF: Something distresses you, mighty warrior Bill?
THOR: Tell us what is wrong, Oath Brother!
Panel 2: BETA RAY BILL is moving his hands about as he tries to signal what’s wrong.
BETA RAY BILL: …!
HOGUN: You’re suffering from a terrible disease!
FANDRAL: You accidentally wore out your lungs wooing a lady!
VOLSTAGG: You’re choking on the bone from a meal!
Panel 3: All stop as they hear LOKI from off-panel.
LOKI (1): (From Off-Panel) Isn’t it obvious?
LOKI (2): (Off-Panel) He’s a little hoarse!
Panel 4: All look in the direction of LOKI. He stands with a wicked, mischievous grin on his face as he holds on hand behind his back, hiding something. BETA RAY BILL looks angry, the rest are surprised.
Panel 5: BETA RAY BILL angrily flies after LOKI, who is running away at top speed, though he’s laughing his head off all the same. THOR, SIF, and the WARRIORS THREE follow in persuit.
BETA RAY BILL: …!!!
SIF: TIS A TERRIBLE JOKE, LOKI!
THOR: AYE! AND THAT PUN IS MUCH OF A STRETCH!
What makes the page is that it plays on the Mischief of Loki, instead of his darker nature. The reactions of the cast make it priceless, but my favorite bit is Loki screaming from off panel, that "if you gotta explain the joke" exasperation. Good fun.ReplyDelete
You should never apologize for writing "just" a pun script. Particularly when you develop it this well. The guesses by Thor and company do a great job of throwing the reader off the trail of the page's true goal, and then Loki hits it home with his snarky one-liner (I'm also way into your title here).ReplyDelete
I may be too into puns (I am), but I also would have loved it if someone unintentionally punned while yelling after Loki ("Aye, 'twas truly foul." or maybe "You make an ass of yourself").