Panel 1: Multiverse Headquarters of the CAPTAIN BRITAIN CORPS. A version of CAPTAIN BRITAIN (SR BRITAIN) is giving a rundown to a new recruit (ROOKIE BRITAIN) as they walk down a rather dapper and royal-looking hallway.
ROOKIE BRITAIN: If I might ask, what about the universes that don’t have a Britain?
SR BRITAIN: What kind of crazy question is that?
Panel 2: ROOKIE BRITAIN tries to explain, though is a bit apprehensive and defensive.
ROOKIE BRITAIN (1): The Multiverse is a huge place, so as much as it pains me to admit it, there have to be versions where Britain doesn’t exist.
ROOKIE BRITAIN (2): So who takes their place in the Corps?
Panel 3: SR BRITAIN reluctantly accepts ROOKIE BRITAIN’s question.
SR BRITAIN (1): Oh, them.
SR BRITAIN (2): Technically, those guys are part of the Corps, but they tend to do their own thing.
Panel 4: SR BRITAIN and ROOKIE BRITAIN walk down the hallway away from the panel.
SR BRITAIN: We’ve got a pocket universe they hang out in or something.
Panel 5: A bar-type building that looks like a mix of various non-British styles. A sign overhead reads “WELCOME – NON-BRITAIN CORPS”. Assembled and hanging out are a number of CAPTAIN BRITAINS who are very much not CAPTAIN BRITAIN from universes where BRITAIN doesn’t actually exist, such as a CAPTAIN AMERICA/CAPTAIN BRITAIN hybrid, some kind of CAPTAIN ROBOT from an all-robot world, an alien from a universe where EARTH itself is nonexistent, etc. Have fun with it.
I like the concept (particularly your dialogue in panels 1 and 2), but I think you could have compressed the latter half of the script to get to the joke faster - panels 3 and 4 seem kind of superfluous.ReplyDelete
For example, you could have thrown in a "Well..." from Sr Britain in panel 2 and gone directly to panel 5 with a caption along the lines of "They generally keep to themselves" or some such.
I do like the clever idea, but I feel that too much is given to the set-up and not enough to the execution.ReplyDelete