(5 Panels)
Panel 1: Multiverse Headquarters of the CAPTAIN
BRITAIN CORPS. A version of CAPTAIN BRITAIN (SR BRITAIN) is giving a rundown to
a new recruit (ROOKIE BRITAIN) as they walk down a rather dapper and
royal-looking hallway.
ROOKIE BRITAIN: If I might ask, what about the universes
that don’t have a Britain?
SR BRITAIN: What kind of crazy question is that?
Panel 2: ROOKIE BRITAIN tries to explain, though is a
bit apprehensive and defensive.
ROOKIE BRITAIN (1): The Multiverse is a huge place, so as
much as it pains me to admit it, there have to be versions where Britain
doesn’t exist.
ROOKIE BRITAIN (2): So who takes their place in the Corps?
Panel 3: SR BRITAIN reluctantly accepts ROOKIE
BRITAIN’s question.
SR BRITAIN (1): Oh, them.
SR BRITAIN (2): Technically, those guys are part of the
Corps, but they tend to do their own thing.
Panel 4: SR BRITAIN and ROOKIE BRITAIN walk down the
hallway away from the panel.
SR BRITAIN: We’ve got a pocket universe they hang out in or
something.
Panel 5: A bar-type building that looks like a mix of
various non-British styles. A sign overhead reads “WELCOME – NON-BRITAIN
CORPS”. Assembled and hanging out are a number of CAPTAIN BRITAINS who are very
much not CAPTAIN BRITAIN from
universes where BRITAIN doesn’t actually exist, such as a CAPTAIN
AMERICA/CAPTAIN BRITAIN hybrid, some kind of CAPTAIN ROBOT from an all-robot
world, an alien from a universe where EARTH itself is nonexistent, etc. Have
fun with it.
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I like the concept (particularly your dialogue in panels 1 and 2), but I think you could have compressed the latter half of the script to get to the joke faster - panels 3 and 4 seem kind of superfluous.
ReplyDeleteFor example, you could have thrown in a "Well..." from Sr Britain in panel 2 and gone directly to panel 5 with a caption along the lines of "They generally keep to themselves" or some such.
I do like the clever idea, but I feel that too much is given to the set-up and not enough to the execution.
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