Sunday, May 17, 2015

D4VE - Self Improvement Is Masturbation, Now Self Destruction Is The Answer - Ryan K. Lindsay

PANEL ONE
Establishing shot of D4VE's garage.

SFX: TUNK

SFX: plink

PANEL TWO
Shot of D4VE, mood lit from above, whiskey bottle nearby, inside the garage. We cannot see his hands here.

Caption: ...

PANEL THREE
D4VE raises a gnarly hammer above his head with his left hand.

D4VE: Fuck you.

PANEL FOUR
D4VE smashes the hammer down, we don't see what on.

SFX: TUNK

PANEL FIVE
D4VE takes a sip of his drink with his left hand.

D4VE: ugh

PANEL SIX
D4VE puts a new metal hand into the end of his right wrist.

SFX: plink

PANEL SEVEN
D4VE flexes the hand in front of his face.

D4VE: Fuck you.

PANEL EIGHT
We cut across to a pile of mangled hands in the corner of the garage.

D4VE (op): Fuck all you.

PANEL NINE
Black panel.

SFX: TUNK

4 comments:

  1. So is he trying to pin the blame of alcoholism on his hand, then?

    Whatever the case may be, it's certainly an interesting play to take advantage of his robot anatomy this way.

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  2. Ha I should have known it would be your name sake nemesis Ryan Ferrier who'd bring you back to the ring.

    You had me straight away - I am a sucker for super long essay like titles. I have always found they had a weird charmer. Super long titles or a single word that's my jam. Your normally a two word title kinda guy I know (Mr Head Space, Deer Editor, Negative Space) maybe I should be doing the two word title thing. ;)

    As for the script I think you nailed the Ferrier tone. Down and dirty with a vein of humour at the core. You dart between panels at pace, which totally fits the pace of the scene your telling. Ending on that black panel is a lovely little visual trick, which for me combined with the TUNK sfx makes for a great offbeat comedy note to end on.

    You also manage to make your scripts as much fun to read as the comic itself would be. I can only assume you sold your soul to the devil for this gift. I knew Ferrier must have!

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  3. Love it. Terse, simple, and spot on tonally. A brutally appropriate take on the character.

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  4. I'm a sucker for this kind of comedy. You laugh, but inside you get just a little uncomfortable. Like Grant said, it's the brutal side that brings that effect.
    Great to have you back, RKL. By the way, my work mate's daughter loves your Rainbow Dash. Kudos to you, sir.

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