(5 Panels)
Panel 1: DAREDEVIL, his location exposed inside a
warehouse against some nontraditional ‘ninjas’. They’re not so much ninja’s as
they are gangsters, thugs, and punks who do a bad job trying to look ninjaesque
and have surprisingly impressive martial arts skills.
DAREDEVIL lands on the
edge of the group. He kicks one in the face as he comes down.
SFX: Thock!
DAREDEVIL: (Thought
Balloon) They certainly aren’t armed like ninjas.
Panel 2: Focus on a NINJA PUNK armed with a slingshot
specially designed to throw ninja stars – the panel should be drawn in
‘DAREDEVIL VISION’ style, as seen in what I think was V3 of Daredevil.
SFX: twang
DAREDEVIL (Thought
Balloon) Shuriken Slingshot?
Panel 3: DAREDEVIL avoids the shot ninja star and
other attacks while shooting his billyclub at a NINJA THUG armed with a katana
poorly retrofitted with a conspicuous-looking power-pack and is buzzing with a
motorized blade. Everything except for DAREDEVIL should be in DAREDEVIL VISION,
and special emphasis should be placed on the sword.
SFX: wack
SFX: (Sword) BZZZZZZZZZ
DAREDEVIL: (Thought
Balloon) Electric Swords?
Panel 4: DAREDEVIL is crouched on the ground while
kicking a FAUX NINJA. He’s looking off-panel while winding up with the
billyclub he shoot in PANEL 3.
SFX: thuk
NINJA GANGSTER: (Off-Panel)
DROP!
DAREDEVIL (Thought
Balloon) A minigun!?
Panel 5: DAREDEVIL VISION. A NINJA GANGSTER armed
with a MINIGUN gets hit in the face with one end of DAREDEVIL’s billyclub. The
gun is active, but not firing any bullets at the moment.
SFX: (Minigun, trails
off) zwrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
SFX: krak!
NINJA GANSTER: GUAH!
DAREDEVIL (Thought
Balloon) I’ve met some ninjas in my time, and these guys are no ninjas.
(END PAGE)
You pack in some interesting and unique visuals here, along with your regular dose of excellent sfx, but I'm not completely sold on the thought balloons. In the context of the single page, they feel a little over-written, although perhaps in a larger context they would fit better.
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