Tuesday, June 2, 2015

Sound Effects - Buzzing - Hansel Moreno

Panel One: Constantine rifles through his latest mark/client to be’s  desk, a slight buzzing noise fills his ears.

SFX: bzzzzzzzzzzzzz, zzzzzzzzzzzz, bzzzzzzzzzzzzz

Panel Two: Constantine pauses his search to pinch the bridge of his nose and lean over the desk.

Constantine: How can anyone properly burgle with all this bloody noise?

Panel Three:  The buzzing resumes and Constantine cringes and resumes his search.

SFX: BZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ, BZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ, BZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ

Panel Four: The buzzing intensifies. Constantine doubles over, clearly in pain. The room begins to lose touch with reality, the gravity lessens sending papers and furniture into the air.

SFX: BZZZZZZZZZ, BZZZZZZZZZZZZ, BEELLLZZZZZZZZZ

Panel Five:  The buzzing reaches its peak, a flash of dark smoke engulfs Constantine.

SFX: BZZZZZZZZZ,  BEELLLZZZZZZZZZ, BEELZEBUB

Constantine: Oh for Christ's sa--

Panel Six: The room clears, the buzzing stops, there is a flaming pentagram on the floor, the smell of sulfur in the air and no sign of Constantine.

NO COPY

3 comments:

  1. Excellent build-up. And the buzzing works with Lucifer being the Lord of the Flies, and all that.

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  2. Really dig this. I like the building buzz, but that second panel, with Constantine pausing to try to concentrate / gather his thoughts really sells it for me - although the fifth and six where he plain disappears are also winners in my mind.

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  3. This one page builds the suspense better than the entire run in the New 52. You just know Hell is right around the corner. Well done. If the character ever goes Vertigo again, I'd read the heck out of it if you wrote it. Cool.

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