Thursday, July 23, 2015

Scott Lang, Ant-Man - Sins of the Past - R.A. Wonsowski

Set-up: A mysterious woman came through Reed Richards's dimensional portal, assaulting Reed and demanding the whereabouts of the Ant-Man. She manages to bypass the security at Avengers Tower, and finds SCOTT LANG in full Ant-Man get-up,  returning from a mission, and heading to the TV room. Blasting energy bolts from her hands, she flies into a rage, attacks LANG, and is even more furious when his helmet is knocked off...

Panel 1- Foreground, a six-inch tall SCOTT LANG jumps from a blasted coffee table, evading a pair of energy bolts. The WOMAN shooting, background, is wearing a black motorcycle helmet (mirrored face shield down) and leathers with yellow piping, aiming carefully and unhurried.

WOMAN: You heard me!! Where is that murdering son of a bitch?!
WOMAN: WHERE'S HENRY PYM?!?

Panel 2- LANG lands and bounds off a sofa cushion, aiming himself at the WOMAN's face.

LANG: ...psycho...
WOMAN: I'LL KILL HIM FIRST!!!

Panel 3- LANG smashes his tiny fist into the WOMAN's faceplate, shattering it.

LANG: Not today, lady...

Panel 4- circular inset, close-up of LANG's face, complete shock.

LANG: ...no...

Panel 5- close-up, through the shattered faceplate, we see revealed the face of JANET VAN DYNE, the Wasp of another dimension, her left eye is covered with a leather eye patch, and her left cheekbone looks like it never healed from a long-ago beating. She's screaming in rage.

JANET: Every Earth, every slide! He's the same! If not WORSE!
JANET: I have to save me! From HIM!!
JANET: HE DOESN'T DESERVE TO BE A AVENGER!!!
JANET: HE DOESN'T DESERVE TO LIVE!!!
...to be continued...

4 comments:

  1. Love this page. You nailed the set-up and great description for the action sequence. How did you form the idea for this scene?

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    1. This was along percolating idea that was originally an Electro story. Bottom line, though, ever since I read the infamous "Hank hits JANET" scene, I lost all respect for PYM as a character. No matter how intelligent he may be, no matter how many times he may have saved the Earth, no matter how some have tried to justify it with "temporary insanity", he will always be the AVENGER who beat his wife. So in truth, this was actually a tale of an interdimensional Janet Van Dyne, jumping from Earth to earth, killing Hank Pyms to save her selves.
      Thank you, glad you liked the page!

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  2. Mmm. I didn't catch the meaning of "I'll kill him first" on the my initial read through, but that line really holds the whole page together. A dark, harried page that ironically says quite a lot with its violence.

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  3. You write action sequences very very well.

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