Sunday, August 9, 2015

Fantastic Four - Familiar Utterances - Grant McLaughlin

1 - Susan stands in an open space, striking a menacing pose as if preparing to enter a fight while starting to turn invisible.

SUSAN: It's time for some transparency!

JOHNNY (OP): Are you striking fear into the hearts of villains or boring them with political policy?

2 - Susan tries again, striking a different action pose while turning invisible (and wearing a frustrated look on her face).

SUSAN: Beware my veiled threats!

BEN (OP): Better attitude, but a little passive-aggressive.

3 - Susan is even more frustrated.  She tries again, waving her (invisible) hand in front of her face.

SUSAN: You can't see me!

JOHNNY (OP): Simple and to the point, but I feel like John Cena may not appreciate it.

4 - Pull back a bit to show that Susan is in the living room with the rest of the Fantastic Four.  Frustrated, Sue sits down on the couch between Johnny and Ben, crossing her arms angerly (and possibly going invisible at the same time).

SUSAN: This is stupid!

5 - Still on the couch, Johnny and Ben try to provide some comfort.  Reed sits on a sofa off to the side.

JOHNNY (1): It's okay, sis.  This kind of thing can take time.  It's not like "Flame on!" was the first thing that came to my mind.  I worked at that for months!

JOHNNY (2): Besides, we're moving in the right direction.  Just remember that there are no bad ideas at this point in the process.

6 - Ben looks over to Reed asking if he's ready.  Reed gets up, looking pretty pleased with himself.

BEN: Why don't try something else.  What do you got, Stretch-o?

REED (1): Well, I don't mean to brag, but I think I have the perfect thing.

REED (2): *ahem*

7 - Reed gets all stretchy as if he's about to do some tussling. He delivers his potential catchphrase.

REED: I hope you have a Fantastic day!

8 - Johnny, Ben, and Sue all look on, dumbfounded at how terrible that was.

9 - Repeat shot. Johnny and Ben turn their attention back to Sue. She looks somewhat heartened by their suggestion.  Reed sits back down on the sofa glumly, his turn to mope.

BEN: Susie, what about something to do with "out of sight, out of mind"?


  1. Sweet, light fun page that looks at the core of that playful back and forth all families have. Excellent use of a nine panel page as well, well paced across the whole thing, very easy to visualise. I'm also a huge fan of the repeat panel and you use that neat trick perfectly here. Top notch Grant.

  2. It's ok, Sue. Not every hero needs a catch phrase, and some are better off without them.

  3. If anything, this page illustrates why SUSAN is such a class act. And I love Reed's earnestness, dispute the groanworthiness of his attempt. Fun page overall.

  4. Awww that was sweet, and too funny!


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