Friday, August 28, 2015

Sonic the Hedgehog – THE PITFALLS OF SUPER-SPEED – Derek Adnams

Page 1 – (6 Panels)

1.1:  Exterior, day, an overgrown swamp in a jungle of mystery.  Sonic is running over a lily-pad covered pond, three alligators sticking their heads out of the water in what appears to be a straight line.  All the reptiles have open menacing mouths, and one of Sonic’s feet is lightly tapping the head of the last alligator.

Sonic (though balloon):  What the heck are these things?

Sonic (thought Balloon):  They look like dinosaurs or something.

1.2:  Sonic running through a slight clearing in the jungle, toward a chasm with a low vine hanging over it.

Sonic (thought balloon):  I wonder if I went too fast this time.

Sonic (thought balloon):  I wonder . . .

1.3:  Sonic swinging on the vine from Panel 1.2, going superfast and gaining velocity, the background a blur.

Sonic (thought balloon):  This is just like those other times, like when I was in that place with castles and coins and the little guy with the mustache.

1.4:  Sonic letting go of the vine, hurling himself through an “end-of-2001: A Space Odyssey” of color.

Sonic (thought balloon):  And all those mushrooms.

1.5:  Interior, the two-dimensional world of the earliest video game, Pong!  Sonic has landed on the near side of the virtual “net”, a rectangle in the foreground preparing to receive a serve from the rectangle in the background.

Sonic:  This just keeps getting worse!!!

1.6:  Sonic running, pursued by a square, the “ball” from Pong!

Silent Panel


  1. Fun! I love all the references, and it makes it seem like Sonic is tripping while running through the various video games.

  2. This is a pretty solid pun payoff you have here, Derek. I think some of your dialogue could be a little tighter, but I agree with David that you have a fun idea on your hands here. A short story set to it would be all kinds of fun.

    1. Thanks Grant! I have no familiarity with the source material, so I watched a few Sonic cartoons from the '90's with my kids to try and get a feel. Dialogue is not my greatest strength and I agree that this one fell a little flat in that department.

  3. When I saw the title, I was praying for Pitfall! But the payoff is pure gold. I love the backwards run through video game history. BTW, if you get a chance, check out the documentary Atari: Game Over for more 8-bit goodness. Cool script.


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