Page 1 – (6 Panels)
1.1: Exterior, day, an overgrown swamp in a
jungle of mystery. Sonic is running over
a lily-pad covered pond, three alligators sticking their heads out of the water
in what appears to be a straight line.
All the reptiles have open menacing mouths, and one of Sonic’s feet is
lightly tapping the head of the last alligator.
Sonic (though
balloon): What the heck are these
things?
Sonic (thought
Balloon): They look like dinosaurs
or something.
1.2: Sonic running through a slight clearing in
the jungle, toward a chasm with a low vine hanging over it.
Sonic (thought balloon): I wonder if I went too fast this time.
Sonic (thought
balloon): I wonder . . .
1.3: Sonic swinging on the vine from Panel 1.2, going superfast and gaining
velocity, the background a blur.
Sonic (thought
balloon): This is just like those
other times, like when I was in that place with castles and coins and the
little guy with the mustache.
1.4: Sonic letting go of the vine, hurling himself
through an “end-of-2001: A Space Odyssey” of color.
Sonic (thought
balloon): And all those mushrooms.
1.5: Interior, the two-dimensional world of the
earliest video game, Pong! Sonic has
landed on the near side of the virtual “net”, a rectangle in the foreground
preparing to receive a serve from the rectangle in the background.
Sonic: This just keeps getting worse!!!
1.6: Sonic running, pursued by a square, the “ball”
from Pong!
Silent Panel
Fun! I love all the references, and it makes it seem like Sonic is tripping while running through the various video games.
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DeleteThis is a pretty solid pun payoff you have here, Derek. I think some of your dialogue could be a little tighter, but I agree with David that you have a fun idea on your hands here. A short story set to it would be all kinds of fun.
ReplyDeleteThanks Grant! I have no familiarity with the source material, so I watched a few Sonic cartoons from the '90's with my kids to try and get a feel. Dialogue is not my greatest strength and I agree that this one fell a little flat in that department.
DeleteWhen I saw the title, I was praying for Pitfall! But the payoff is pure gold. I love the backwards run through video game history. BTW, if you get a chance, check out the documentary Atari: Game Over for more 8-bit goodness. Cool script.
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