Friday, September 11, 2015


Page 1 – (6 Panels)

1.1:  Exterior, sunset, a row of boxcars crawling through a field of tall grass.  Our protagonist, Hobo Blues Guy, is jumping out of a moving boxcar, a slightly obscured package right in front of where he is about to land.  One of his hands is on the derby-style hat perched on his head.

Hobo Blues Guy (caption):  It doesn’t take a lot to write a good song.  The best are the simplest.

Hobo Blues Guy (caption):  Some E, a little A, add some D and slide down to B for the chorus.  Maybe throw a seventh in before verse two.

1.2:  Hobo Blues Guy bending over to pick-up the package, which is a beat-to-hell guitar case.  This is the only thing he carries and that he owns.

Hobo Blues Guy (caption):  I like to stay low, really pound out some open chords as loud as I can.

1.3:  Hobo Blues Guy crossing an old-timey “Bridges of Madison County” looking wooden bridge.  In the foreground is a sign “Greensboro 11 Miles”.

Hobo Blues Guy (caption):  Until I get to the bridge.

Hobo Blues Guy (caption):  And realize how minor I can become.

1.4:  Hobo Blues Guy, now on a busy Main Street, placing his hat on the ground, ready to collect spare change and small bills.

Hobo Blues Guy (caption):  But then the song comes back - - keeps coming back, always and forever - - to the verse.

1.5:  Hobo Blues Guy sitting on a step, playing his guitar as a small crowd of smiling onlookers stands around.

Hobo Blues Guy (caption):  Whether it’s a sad blues jam or a happy pop tune, all I want as the guy behind the guitar is for the audience to feel.

1.6:  Hobo Blues Guy, alone in the panel, eyes closed, head pointed to Heaven, strumming his guitar and singing his lungs out, smiling.

Hobo Blues Guy (caption):  And know that I feel too.



  1. Lovely stuff, Derek. I like the music wordplay towards the start, but am even more into the heartfelt moment towards the end. A nice metaphor for all creative expression methinks.

  2. Hey Derek -- I wrote a comment on this a few days ago, but I guess I'm an idiot when it comes to the internet, cause it ain't here anymore. I'll try to capture again what I wrote.

    I really dig this comic. I love the way the caption-voiceover moves against the images: at times they draw together to emphasize something, and at other moments give us a bit of distance to consider the contrasting elements contained in the words and images. I admire how you pull off the bridge/bridge thing -- that could have fallen flat, but it really works as you play it here. Two thoughts if you felt like returning to it. One, I think you might be able to give yourself an extra panel between 1.1. and 1.2. I think that the second caption might benefit from having it's own imagery/narrative-moment to work against. That would let all of those elements you fit into 1.1. breathe a little bit. Second, and this is super nit-picky, but I might keep the thing focused on blues -- and cut that "pop tune" ref in 1.5. The imagery throughout builds upon pretty classic southern blues tropes, and I think that keeping that sad-but-joyful-and-alive-through-music vibe going as we near the end might be more impactful than swinging in with the pop music. As I said, a super-specific comment that you should totally ignore if it seems off-base. But I thought it worth noting since you got this question of blues (and what the blues are...) going in my mind. Thanks for sharing this cool piece! C


Feedback is what every good writer wants and needs, so please provide it in the white box below
If you want to play along at home, feel free to put your scripts under the Why? post for the week.