Tuesday, January 19, 2016

Mirror Universe - One Way Reunion - Nicholas O'Gorman

PANEL 1: Establishing shot of a bedroom, clothes lying wanton here-and-there. On the bed a hetero sexual pair (ALISON and SEBASTIAN) in the heat of it and reaching climax.

PANEL 2: Done the deed, they collapse in exhaustion, lazily caressing each other.

SEBASTIAN:
Wow, we’ve never been in sync like that before!

PANEL 3: Close up of Alison, looking quizzically.

ALISON:
We.. b-before?

PANEL 4: FLASH BACK: Alternate Universe ALISON and the self-same SEBASTIAN. They are sitting in an intimate restaurant, but there is miles of emotional distance separating the pair: SEBASTIAN is obviously being dumped.

CAP:
BEFORE.

PANEL 5: FLASHBACK [CONT.] SEBASTIAN is left alone and distraught at the restaurant table, collapsing in on himself. A bottle of wine sits on the table, fully drank, with a second bottle in SEBASTIAN's hand.

CAP:
BEFORE.

PANEL 6: FLASHBACK [CONT.] ALISON’S wedding, SEBASTIAN watching the newlyweds leave the church to much fanfare, but he across the street is sitting in his car, idling, and obviously crushed. A torn up or crumpled invitation (PLUS 1 visible on the invite if possible) and a gun is on the dashboard.

CAP:
BEFORE.

PANEL 7: FLASHBACK [CONT.] SEBASTIAN is in a top level security military compound. Around the room are dead military men and women, he is standing on a teleporter of sorts, and energy encases him as he teleports to another dimension. On the terminal screen we see a different dimensional earth is selected, amid a host of other different dimensional earth options.

CAP:
BEFORE.

PANEL 8: We have a close up of SEBASTIAN.

SEBASTIAN V.O.:
(1): ‘BEFORE’…
(2): The word turns to bitter in my mouth realizing I have fucked up this relationship…
(3): Again.

PANEL 9: Extradimensional law enforcers burst into the room, detaining SEBASTIAN, ALISON covers her body under the covers and looks truly mortified.

3 comments:

  1. I mentioned this when looking over the script originally, but I love all them "BEFORE" flashback bits, revealing the lead-up to this epic fail. At 9 panels, it makes for a full page, but I think you use the space well.

    One, rather minor, thing I'd suggest would be possibly shifting Sebastian's "Again" in panel 8 to panel 9. In my mind, that and the dimension cops could add a bit of dark humour to the conclusion.

    Regardless, nice page.

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  2. Will def. amend it as per your suggestion Grant. Will prob draw this sometime next week. Colleen read it and liked it, i mentioned drawing it, and she wanted it to be multiple pages, i told her its not gonna be decompressed like that.

    She also said it was a love story. I told her it wasn't, and in fact it was a perversion of love.

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  3. Haha. I'm with you in thinking this isn't quite what I'd call a love story.

    Very excited to hear you're planning on drawing this up. Would definitely love to see it once it's done.

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